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Please correct the syntax, grammar etc of my C.V.
Europass Curriculum Vitae | ||||||||||||
Personal information | ||||||||||||
First name(s) / Surname(s) | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Address | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Mobile | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
E-mail(s) | xxxxxx | |||||||||||
Nationality | xxxt | |||||||||||
Date of birth | xxxx | |||||||||||
Gender | xxxx | |||||||||||
Work experience | ||||||||||||
Dates | 01 January 2003 - 30 April 2011 | |||||||||||
Occupation or position held | Senior Accountant and Systems Administrator | |||||||||||
Main activities and responsibilities | Planning of the bookkeeping to be undertaken by the accounting staff, involving the preparation of time and cost budgets and supervising the accounting staff work and helping them with any technical difficulties that they may come across; Preparing cash flows and income/expenditure budgets, monitoring the company’s expenditure/costs, payments to suppliers and liaising with staff and the banks concerning debt collection; Updating and maintaining on a daily basis the accounting records of the company with extracting and interpreting the financial records of the company at any given time; Responsible for supporting the company’s Windows Server 2003, Active directory, Exchange, VMware virtualization, application support, Server Administration and Security as well as Backup and Disaster recovery; Providing day-to-day support for infrastructure and security components such as Network Switches, Firewalls, WAN connectivity, VPN and Anti-Virus; Manages the company’s Servers, Workstations and X terminals, setting up user accounts, scheduling upgrades and implements security protocols to ensure Database and System security; Recommends and directs software changes and updates to keep department systems up-to-date and is responsible for the provision of IT infrastructure services including Desktop applications, Local and / or Wide area networks, IT security and Telecommunications; Programs specific applications in response to department/ client needs, installing and debugging new and/ or upgraded software on Server and Client platforms, ensuring compliance with current site Licenses, Designs, Programs and manages websites and associated pages; Creates web content, web graphics, multimedia and creative writing content for websites, assisting in developing user policies and procedures, issues written and/ or oral instructions, investigates and reports complaints; Develops and implements various training and instruction programs for users on the use of Operating Systems, Networking, Applications and Databases and provides advice to other senior managers and boards on IT issues and planning. | |||||||||||
Name and address of employer | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Ltd xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Type of business or sector | Accounting, Consultancy & Marketing services | |||||||||||
Dates | 01 September 2000 - 01 September 2002 | |||||||||||
Occupation or position held | Computer Programmer | |||||||||||
Main activities and responsibilities | Supporting and maintaining the company’s Web Servers, Mail Servers and Application Servers and planning for and responding to service outages and other problems; Solving of software and hardware problems for the operations of the IT department as well as the needs of the company’s external customers; Troubleshooting networks, systems, and applications to identify and correct malfunctions and other operational problems; Configuring and customizing the company's Enterprise Backup system which consists of multiple Backup Servers, Backup Clients, and Backup Libraries; Cisco Networking and VOIP. CCNA / CCNP networking skills and knowledge of supporting systems within the organization; Object oriented development including JAVA (Applications, Applets, Servlets), Visual Café, HTML, SQL-Databases (Access, SQL Server, Oracle DB, mySQL, FoxPro), Windows 9x, Windows 2000, NT and Server Management (Oracle, Apache Tomcat, IIS, Apache WebServer). | |||||||||||
Name and address of employer | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Ltd xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Type of business or sector | Internet Banking, Graphics and Web Solutions | |||||||||||
Dates | 01 June 1995 - 30 June 1999 | |||||||||||
Occupation or position held | Financial Controller | |||||||||||
Main activities and responsibilities | Involves in maintaining and updating accounting records of many of the firm’s local and overseas clients and taking care of VAT issues (VAT records, completion of VAT returns, etc.); Participating in various Audits (as a junior and semi-senior Auditor) of both local and overseas companies, preparing draft Audited accounts for finalization purposes, tax computations and completing tax forms both for corporations as well as self employed individuals and other related tasks; Collecting, analyzing and grouping documentary evidence in order to proceed with the preparation of periodic Management Accounts and Annual financial Accounts of the firm; Performing bookkeeping and payroll entries regularly as well as meetings with the Managing Partner, discussing the results with him and other matters, such as advice concerning the firm’s Tax position, profitability and cash flow projections; Performing and supervising of highly complex payroll and benefits activity for 20 employees, calculating of the firm's PAYE taxes, social security contributions, medical fund premiums and any other similar deductions, resolving non-routine problems, interpreting policies and contracts and implementing the firm's policies and procedures; Regular contacts with the Central Bank of Cyprus, the Department of the Registrar of Companies and Official Receiver, the Tax Authorities, Immigration and other Authorities of Cyprus mainly for accounting, tax and auditing issues but also for issues such as work permit renewals, social insurance issues, etc. | |||||||||||
Name and address of employer | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Type of business or sector | Certified Public Accountants | |||||||||||
Dates | 01 January 1993 - 31 May 1995 | |||||||||||
Occupation or position held | Owner | |||||||||||
Main activities and responsibilities | Maintaining the appropriate inventory levels; Data handling and communication with suppliers and key customers; Supervising the operations and financial records of the business. | |||||||||||
Name and address of employer | xxxxxxxxxxxx Ltd xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Type of business or sector | Arts, entertainment and recreation | |||||||||||
Dates | 01 January 1993 - 30 April 1995 | |||||||||||
Occupation or position held | Broadcast and Sound Recording Engineer | |||||||||||
Main activities and responsibilities | Connecting wires and cables, setting and operating Audio and Video equipment, including microphones, sound speakers, video screens, projectors, video monitors, recording equipment and related electronic equipment for concerts, sports events, meetings, conventions, presentations and news conferences; Maintaining and operating the Broadcast and Recording equipment in order to record, synchronize, mix, or reproduce music, voices, or sound effects in recording studios, sporting arenas, theatre productions, or movie and video productions; Checking the sound quality of the link back to the studio when covering outdoor events like football matches, political rallies and cultural events. | |||||||||||
Name and address of employer | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx x | |||||||||||
Type of business or sector | TV channel | |||||||||||
Education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Level in national or international classification | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Principal subjects / occupational skills covered | Information Systems -This module covers the following topics: systems analysis and design, database systems, data analysis and management, systems and organisations; Software Development - Programming, using many styles and languages, provides solutions to a wide variety of scientific, engineering and business problems. Programming is a core skill that will be used throughout a computer practitioner’s career. It is a skill acquired largely by practice and experience. Learning how to program requires a disciplined and structured approach in order to encourage good practice and to assist in the development of easily maintained systems. This module introduces candidates to the fundamental concepts of programming with the emphasis being laid on the whole of the software development process; Computer & Network Technology -This module provides a foundation for all professional computer personnel in computer technology and related topics, in particular the areas of: number systems, hardware, operating systems, systems software, networks and system performance measurement. | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Level in national or international classification | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | BSc, Business Administration with Management Information Systems | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | Diploma, Business Administration with Management Information Systems | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Title of qualification awarded | Certificate, Accounting Higher | |||||||||||
Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates Title of qualification awarded Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates Title of qualification awarded | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates Title of qualification awarded Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Dates Title of qualification awarded Name and type of organisation providing education and training | xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Personal skills and Competences | ||||||||||||
2005 www.xxxxxxxxxx..com– Prepared and designed my father’s website; | ||||||||||||
2002 Submitting and presenting of my final year Project in Management of Information Systems: LPro: A Linear Programming Language | ||||||||||||
2002 Submitting and presenting of my final year Project in Business Administration: Senior Simulation in Business. This project represents a computerised computer oriented management/marketing simulation which is used to synthesize learning experiences analysing business problems, integrating the study of accounting, economics, finance, management and marketing; | ||||||||||||
1992 – 1993 xxxxxxxxx Disco – Designed and implemented the installation of the audio equipment throughout the disco and providing technical support based on immediate and future needs; | ||||||||||||
1989 – 1993 xxxxxxxxxx FM Stereo – Designed, installed and operated an amateur radio station which was covering a small area of about 30 miles. Producing a variety of live programmes and some indoor “Studio Recordings”. Transmitting these productions, around the clock. | ||||||||||||
Mother tongue(s) | xxxxxxxxx | |||||||||||
Other language(s) | ||||||||||||
Self-assessment | Understanding | Speaking | W r i t i n g | |||||||||
European level (*) | Listening | Reading | Spoken interaction | Spoken production | ||||||||
English | C1 | Proficient user | C1 | Proficient user | B2 | Independent user | B2 | Independent user | B2 | Independent user | ||
(*) Common European Framework of Reference (CEF) level | ||||||||||||
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Hi, Just one quick and very general comment. In Canada, where I live, it's widely accepted that such documents should not be more than two pages. Many employers will not read them if they are longer.
- Hi, Just one quick and very general comment.
- In Canada, where I live, it's widely accepted that such documents should not be more than two pages.
- Many employers will not read them if they are longer.
- Clive
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Hi,
Just one quick and very general comment.
In Canada, where I live, it's widely accepted that such documents should not be more than two pages. Many employers will not read them if they are longer.
Clive
Just one quick and very general comment.
In Canada, where I live, it's widely accepted that such documents should not be more than two pages. Many employers will not read them if they are longer.
Clive
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Agreed! But in my case Europass CV is basically for public/ goverment positions.
For Private Sector, my draft CV is written in one page only !
According to my Europass CV, I kept some text which I have copied from my Course Syllabus in order to help you to catch the concept and then to apply any corrections to the rest sections/ parts, etc of my CV.
For example th
For Private Sector, my draft CV is written in one page only !
According to my Europass CV, I kept some text which I have copied from my Course Syllabus in order to help you to catch the concept and then to apply any corrections to the rest sections/ parts, etc of my CV.
For example th
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for a resume, it might be OK. Your sentences are mostly fragmented.
Hoowever, the content is rather bothersome.
- where is your educational background?
- how could you do two extremely diverse full-time jobs (managing the accountants and maintaining the IT infrastructure) at the same time?
- copying something from a course syllabus isn't a very good idea for a C
Hoowever, the content is rather bothersome.
- where is your educational background?
- how could you do two extremely diverse full-time jobs (managing the accountants and maintaining the IT infrastructure) at the same time?
- copying something from a course syllabus isn't a very good idea for a C
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Please forget about the structure and other matters which are related about the presentation of my CV. I would like to correct the grammar and syntax of the content.
Please do focus to the above said content!
Please do focus to the above said content!
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Please forget about the structure and other matters which are related about the presentation of my CV. I would like to correct the grammar and syntax of the content.
Please do focus to the above said content!
Please do focus to the above said content!
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Antonis,
This is huge amount of text. The main thing I notice is that there are no sentences, only fragments. Sometimes the fragment starts with a participle (e.g. maintaining, planning...) and sometimes a 3rd-person present or past finite verb, and sometimes a noun phrase. If you are going to write in fragments (which is not my prefered style), you should at least be consistent. There a
This is huge amount of text. The main thing I notice is that there are no sentences, only fragments. Sometimes the fragment starts with a participle (e.g. maintaining, planning...) and sometimes a 3rd-person present or past finite verb, and sometimes a noun phrase. If you are going to write in fragments (which is not my prefered style), you should at least be consistent. There a
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Thanks a lot!
I fully agree with your Recommended change but at the moment I do not want to show what is more impressive or to show that I am fully charge of a group or to giving a stress of the size of a group.
The only thing I am asking from you is to change and/or amend my text in order to be retained a uniformity! As you said, I should at least be consistent! This is what I
I fully agree with your Recommended change but at the moment I do not want to show what is more impressive or to show that I am fully charge of a group or to giving a stress of the size of a group.
The only thing I am asking from you is to change and/or amend my text in order to be retained a uniformity! As you said, I should at least be consistent! This is what I
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