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Lission Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please correct the short story
Hi fellow members
Could any member/s go through this short story and point out any errors and how I can improve on the story.
Many thanks in advance.
One day, the wind said to the clouds, “I’m stronger than you. I can puff the trees and the houses down.”
The clouds retorted, “We’re stronger than you. Without us, the earth will be dry.”
“OK,” said the wind. “Let’s see who will destroy more parts of the earth.”
“I accept the challenge,” said the clouds.
The wind huffed and puffed and destroyed many parts of the earth. In the meantime, the clouds were nowhere in sight. The earth slowly dried up.
The battle between the clouds and the wind came to an end. There was no winner because the whole earth was ruined. The loser was the earth.
Could any member/s go through this short story and point out any errors and how I can improve on the story.
Many thanks in advance.
One day, the wind said to the clouds, “I’m stronger than you. I can puff the trees and the houses down.”
The clouds retorted, “We’re stronger than you. Without us, the earth will be dry.”
“OK,” said the wind. “Let’s see who will destroy more parts of the earth.”
“I accept the challenge,” said the clouds.
The wind huffed and puffed and destroyed many parts of the earth. In the meantime, the clouds were nowhere in sight. The earth slowly dried up.
The battle between the clouds and the wind came to an end. There was no winner because the whole earth was ruined. The loser was the earth.
Top answer
" And another thing is that if the clouds are mentioned in the story are plural so you had better say " we accept the challan
- " And another thing is that if the clouds are mentioned in the story are plural so you had better say " we accept the challan
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The First thing I want to say that it would be better to say "without us, the earth will dry up."
And another thing is that if the clouds are mentioned in the story are plural so you had better say " we accept the challan
And another thing is that if the clouds are mentioned in the story are plural so you had better say " we accept the challan
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