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Believer Posted 20 years ago
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Please correct the following
[P/S] Please correct the following:
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This is what I see occurring/happening on the play ground. There is boy walking, holding a heavy bag. There are two people/persons, a male and a female, riding a double-seated yellow bicycle. There is a bear lying on the ground almost nonchalant, eating peanuts. There are two grown men in the twenties arm-wrestling with their elbows on the wooden table. There is what appears to be a sanitation worker watching the arm-wrestling match in what appears to be in his break as it is happening, while chowing down a big sprinkled-with-nuts donut.
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This is what I see occurring/happening on the play ground. There is boy walking, holding a heavy bag. There are two people/persons, a male and a female, riding a double-seated yellow bicycle. There is a bear lying on the ground almost nonchalant, eating peanuts. There are two grown men in the twenties arm-wrestling with their elbows on the wooden table. There is what appears to be a sanitation worker watching the arm-wrestling match in what appears to be in his break as it is happening, while chowing down a big sprinkled-with-nuts donut.
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This is what I see happening in the play ground. There is boy walking while holding a heavy bag. There are two people (children would be a better choice) , a male and a female (male and female are very technical terms, not usually used directly of people.
- This is what I see happening in the play ground.
- There is boy walking while holding a heavy bag.
- There are two people (children would be a better choice) , a male and a female (male and female are very technical terms, not usually used directly of people.
- Boy and girl would be better.
- You'd talk about male and female animals) riding a double-seated yellow bicycle.
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This is what I see happening in the play ground. There is boy walking while holding a heavy bag. There are two people (children would be a better choice) , a male and a female (male and female are very technical terms, not usually used directly of people. Boy and girl would be better. You'd talk about male and female animals) riding a double-seated yellow bicycle. There is a bear ly
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Thank you, Nona.
Can I ask you why you changed the relative clause, "while chowing down a big sprinked-with-nuts donut" with "as he is chowing down a big sprinkled-with-nuts donut."? I think I can grasp the subtle yet very tangible difference between the two, yet cannot clearly explain as can be understood even by myself. Help.
Can I ask you why you changed the relative clause, "while chowing down a big sprinked-with-nuts donut" with "as he is chowing down a big sprinkled-with-nuts donut."? I think I can grasp the subtle yet very tangible difference between the two, yet cannot clearly explain as can be understood even by myself. Help.
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Hi,
A minor comment. The slang expression 'chow down' is intransitive. It usually takes the form 'chow down on something'.
Best wishes, Clive
A minor comment. The slang expression 'chow down' is intransitive. It usually takes the form 'chow down on something'.
Best wishes, Clive
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Nona The Brit
This is what I see happening in the play ground. There is boy walking while holding a heavy bag. There are two people (children would be a better choice) , a male and a female (male and female are very technical terms, not usually used directly of people. Boy and girl would be better. You'd talk about male and female animals) riding a doub
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Hi CK.
If you want to place a relative clause "who is holding a heavy bag," that relative clause should be place right after the noun it is specifying or gives information on. Thus, I think your sentence should look like this:
There is a boy, who is holding a heavy bag, walk down the street.
*I add the underlined prepositional phrase (?) to make the sentenc
If you want to place a relative clause "who is holding a heavy bag," that relative clause should be place right after the noun it is specifying or gives information on. Thus, I think your sentence should look like this:
There is a boy, who is holding a heavy bag, walk down the street.
*I add the underlined prepositional phrase (?) to make the sentenc
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hello
can you say "'When I don't mind my path i get into a spin"?
thank you!
can you say "'When I don't mind my path i get into a spin"?
thank you!
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Hi Sleepyslop,
Welcome to the Forum.
'When I don't mind my path i get into a spin"?
Your English is OK here, but your meaning is unclear.
Do you mean 'When I don't watch where I am going, I fall down'?
Best wishes, Clive
Welcome to the Forum.
'When I don't mind my path i get into a spin"?
Your English is OK here, but your meaning is unclear.
Do you mean 'When I don't watch where I am going, I fall down'?
Best wishes, Clive
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