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Wangqh2696122 Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please correct the essay, if there any errors

For God's sake, follow your dreams

We were just about getting ready to warm up for the practice game over the weekend when I had an interesting conversation with one of the team mates I actually didn't know quite well.



"So what do you do?" he asked. "Well, we work for ourselves, we run a software company", I replied. "Oh really! that's awesome! I work for xyz company, but you know I always wanted to get into animation design and work for myself. It was my dream. I got stuck in the wrong industry."
"You ain't dead yet, are you?" I thought trying hard not say that aloud. He continued "You know, I've been wanting to do this for 10 years now, but once you have a family, it's very tough to do anything else."
I couldn't resist anymore, so I said "That's great, if you really want to do that, may be you should take up some animation classes, or do some self learning at your own pace. That would be a good start". Pat came the reply "Nahh it's very difficult, with family, full time job, no time. I would love to, but I can't."
Reluctantly, I suggested "Then may be you should consider training full time for a few weeks/months and perhaps dive in full-time?" He looked at me like I had just asked him to cut off his right hand. "Are you crazy? Where will the paycheck come from?"



Realizing this conversation was heading towards an argument with someone I didn't know very well at the first place, I chose to just smile and leave it at that. But it made me think. What is it with people refusing to take some risks to follow their dreams. Are their dreams not worth it? If not, why do we sulk about them later? Don't we owe it to ourselves to at least give our dreams a fair shot?



  

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Hi wangqh2696122 - I don't have many suggestions, only some minor niggles - it's a great essay. For ***'s sake, follow your dreams We were just about getting ready to warm up for the practice game over the weekend ( "over the weekend" is a period of 2 days. It is not consistent with a single event - warming up for a game.

  • Hi wangqh2696122 - I don't have many suggestions, only some minor niggles - it's a great essay.
  • For ***'s sake, follow your dreams We were just about getting ready to warm up for the practice game over the weekend ( "over the weekend" is a period of 2 days.
  • It is not consistent with a single event - warming up for a game.
  • Just write "this past weekend" or "last weekend") when I had an interesting conversation with one of the (my) team mates ( teammate is one word) I actually didn't know quite well.
  • " he asked.
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Hi wangqh2696122 -
I don't have many suggestions, only some minor niggles - it's a great essay.

For ***'s sake, follow your dreams

We were just about getting ready to warm up for the practice game over the weekend ( "over the weekend" is a period of 2 days. It is not consistent with a single event - warming up for a game. Just write "this past weekend" or "last we

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