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Arista Posted 17 years ago
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Have you ever been lost in your life? And have you had no idea what is going on (to you)? I think most of people have felt that way, and I have too. When I was still younger, I regarded as hardships that I had to go through in my early twenties are ashamed. I kept thinking that I would have graduated from school along with my friends and had my job, if I had not had any adversity. But I realized that these thoughts were never worth thinking on. Because there is no one who can save me from troubles but myself. I should not have been shamed about my hardships, but I should have been ashamed at myself who constantly thought that ‘why does it always rain on me?’
When I was twenty, I was in the raptures of happiness as a freshman. I often dreamed about exciting events, such as traveling abroad, volunteer work and being into my major, which a college student would have considered about at least once. (As far as I can recall,) Just the thought about that things made my heart flutter everyday. But, at that time, my parents' financial condition was faced with difficulties. At last I had to work at mother's shop which is sushi restaurant. Since I was immature, and working was really out of my plan, I blamed my mother for my delayed school studies. A year later, I went to back to school and really made an effort to catch up with other students. So in the year when I came back to school, even though I was working part-time job, I got a scholarship with honors.
Have you ever been lost in your life? And have you had no idea what is going on (to you)? I think most of people have felt that way, and I have too. When I was still younger, I regarded as hardships that I had to go through in my early twenties are ashamed. I kept thinking that I would have graduated from school along with my friends and had my job, if I had not had any adversity. But I realized that these thoughts were never worth thinking on. Because there is no one who can save me from troubles but myself. I should not have been shamed about my hardships, but I should have been ashamed at myself who constantly thought that ‘why does it always rain on me?’
When I was twenty, I was in the raptures of happiness as a freshman. I often dreamed about exciting events, such as traveling abroad, volunteer work and being into my major, which a college student would have considered about at least once. (As far as I can recall,) Just the thought about that things made my heart flutter everyday. But, at that time, my parents' financial condition was faced with difficulties. At last I had to work at mother's shop which is sushi restaurant. Since I was immature, and working was really out of my plan, I blamed my mother for my delayed school studies. A year later, I went to back to school and really made an effort to catch up with other students. So in the year when I came back to school, even though I was working part-time job, I got a scholarship with honors.
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Your writing is exellent, and I could see parts of your experiences until now. Despite a lot of adversity, you have achieved some of your hope, and from now, without doubt you will achieve your all dreams. You may be really a gripping one, I think.
- Your writing is exellent, and I could see parts of your experiences until now.
- Despite a lot of adversity, you have achieved some of your hope, and from now, without doubt you will achieve your all dreams.
- You may be really a gripping one, I think.
- Good Luck!
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Your writing is exellent, and I could see parts of your experiences until now. Despite a lot of adversity, you have achieved some of your hope, and from now, without doubt you will achieve your all dreams. You may be really a gripping one, I think. Good Luck!
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arista I regarded as hardships that I had to go through in my early twenties are ashamed.
This sentence looks awkward. I don't understand it.
arista I would have graduated from school along with my friends and have my job, if I had not had any adversity.I might not catch some errors of your writing, but I hope that my
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