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SpoonfedBaby Posted 21 years ago
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Please, correct my translation: Neil Young

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00I translated a short news article from French to English.00 00Please, would you correct my translation?02br
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00 It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 00. He interpreted his rock hymn to the freedom, 01i00Rockin' In The Free World02i00.00 00That was Neil Young first show since he was a victim of aneurism earlier this year.02br
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00 C'est la légende du rock Neil Young qui a terminé le concert géant vers 21 heures. Il a interprété son hymne rock à la liberté, 01i00Rockin' In The Free World02i00. Il s'agissait du premier spectacle de Neil Young depuis qu'il a été victime d'un anévrisme, plus tôt cette année.02br
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00Thank you very much,02br
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0It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00. 02br 02br 00Here are my suggestions:02br 02br 00It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00. 02br 02br 00I'm not sure about using the term "interpreted" - is it significant in the French?

  • 0It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00.
  • 02br 02br 00Here are my suggestions:02br 02br 00It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00.
  • 02br 02br 00I'm not sure about using the term "interpreted" - is it significant in the French?
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0It was the legendary rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00. He interpreted his rock hymn to the freedom, 01i00Rockin' In The Free World02i00.00 00That was Neil Young first show since he was a victim of aneurism earlier this year.02br
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0 And in spite of the dictionary, I'd save 'legendary' for someone who has died or whose glory is definitely in the past, SFB.02br
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0 Text revised according to the suggestions:02br
00 It was the 01b00famous02b00 rock star Neil Young who ended the huge concert 00around 009 pm00. He interpreted his rock hymn 01b00to freedom02b00, 01i00Rockin' In The Free World02i00.00 01b00This02b00 was Neil Young01b

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