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Shafi Rehma Posted 12 years ago
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please correct my poem
Lonely patches
Rendering and wondering amongst my self
Solace and calmness before I get
Bewildered in the strangeness lying ahead
Yet, in the midst of thought buried my head
But the desire I lay, it burns like fire
Prevented to say if I am a liar
To accomplish them is to run out of time
The stairs are spiral, I can’t climb
Fill up my soul, the emptiness it resides
The flesh of mine is burning inside
Rendering and wondering amongst my self
Solace and calmness before I get
Bewildered in the strangeness lying ahead
Yet, in the midst of thought buried my head
But the desire I lay, it burns like fire
Prevented to say if I am a liar
To accomplish them is to run out of time
The stairs are spiral, I can’t climb
Fill up my soul, the emptiness it resides
The flesh of mine is burning inside
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Shafi Rehma Rendering and wondering amongst my self That's a strange wording. Do you mean "Wondering at me in the maze of myself"?
- Shafi Rehma Rendering and wondering amongst my self That's a strange wording.
- Do you mean "Wondering at me in the maze of myself"?
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Shafi RehmaRendering and wondering amongst my selfThat's a strange wording.
Do you mean "Wondering at me in the maze of myself"?
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It's my take on it:
Wondering at me,
In the maze of myself,
Solace and calmness,
Before I get confused,
In the strangeness ahead,
In the midst of the thought
Where I bury myself.
The burning desire,
A sudden, rapid fire,
Is that a lie?
The stairs are spiral,
That I can’t climb
To fill up emptiness,
The heart yearning for love
Wondering at me,
In the maze of myself,
Solace and calmness,
Before I get confused,
In the strangeness ahead,
In the midst of the thought
Where I bury myself.
The burning desire,
A sudden, rapid fire,
Is that a lie?
The stairs are spiral,
That I can’t climb
To fill up emptiness,
The heart yearning for love
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Losing my child’s custody
One day you will begin to know
When reality will come to show
Daddy’s love for you is real
This’s the simple truth indeed
My broken heart continues breaking
As I keep wondering and thinking
Why can’t I guide you through this world?
And play with you all day and kiss you good night?
My heart is full
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