Please correct my plot summary

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Hello. I had to write the plot summary of the story, "Necklace" by Gui De Maupassany within 200 to 300 words, but my plot summary exceeded 300 words. I do not know which words to omit. Also, I am not satisfied with my usage of vocabularies, word choosing, and grammar. I appreciate your help! Thank you.

Plot Summary: Necklace

Necklace is the story of a very poor woman's huge life changes by encountering a necklace. The woman, named Mathilde Loisel who is poor and married a clerk, is described as a pretty woman and trying to have a rich life delusion because of her cheap belongings. One day her husband received a party invitation card for him ans his wife, but Mathilde does not want to go to the party since she does not have a dress for the party, so her husband gave her the money to buy her dress by giving up his next summer vacation. However, she is still not satisfied because she thought that only dress looks awful, so she went to her friend, named Mrs. Jeanne Forrestier who is very rich and beautiful, to rend her superb diamond necklace. At the party, Mathilde looked so beautiful and every men looked and danced with her, and she did not leave until four o' clock in the morning. Her husband came to the place of the party to pick her up, and they went back to their home, but Mathilde found out that the necklace is not around her neck anymore. Her husband looked everywhere with utmost effort, but he could not find it. He finally finds a shop where had a necklace of diamond that looks exactly the same, so he decides to buy it using the money that his father had left for him and borrowing the money. Mathilde took the necklace to return to Mrs. Forrestier. Mathilde was thinking whether telling the truth is the best or not, but she eventually decided not to speak the truth. Mr. and Mrs. Loisel had a hardship in their life, and they took ten years to pay the loan back for the necklace. Mathilde learned how to do a house work. She meets Mrs. Forrestier unexpectedly, and Mathilde finds out that the Mrs. Forrestier's necklace was not a real diamond.

Julielai · Accepted Answer

You went back and forth between present tense and past tense.

Kyorochan · Answer

Okay. Thank you! I fixed the tense to all present tense. How does it look now? Is it much better than before, or do I need more effort to fix it?

Thank you.

Plot Summary: Necklace

Necklace is the story of a very poor woman's huge life changes by encountering a necklace. The woman, named Mathilde Loisel who is poor and married a clerk, is described as a pretty woman and trying to have a rich life delusion because of her cheap belongings. One day her husband receives a party invitation card for him ans his wife, but Mathilde does not want to go to the party since she does not have a dress for the party, so her husband gives her the money to buy her dress by giving up his next summer vacation. However, she is still not satisfied because she thinks that only dress looks awful, so she goes to her friend, named Mrs. Jeanne Forrestier who is very rich and beautiful, to borrow her superb diamond necklace. At the party, Mathilde looks so beautiful and every men watch her and dance with her. Her husband comes to the place of the party to pick her up, and they go back to their home, but Mathilde found out that the necklace is not around her neck anymore. Her husband searches everywhere with utmost effort, but he can not find it. He finally finds a shop where has a necklace of diamond that looks exactly the same, so he decides to buy it using the money that his father had left for him and borrowing the money. Mathilde takes the necklace to return to Mrs. Forrestier. Mathilde thinks whether telling the truth is the best or not, and she eventually decided not to speak the truth. Mr. and Mrs. Loisel had a hardship in their life, and it takes ten years to pay the loan back for the necklace. Mathilde learns how to do a house work. She meets Mrs. Forrestier unexpectedly, and Mathilde finds out that the Mrs. Forrestier's necklace is not a real diamond.

Julielai · Answer

Highlighted a few things that need some work.

Necklace is the story about a very poor woman's huge life changes by encountering a necklace. The woman, named Mathilde Loisel who is poor and married a clerk, is described as a pretty woman and trying to have a rich life delusion because of her cheap belongings. One day her husband receives a party invitation card for him ans his wife, but Mathilde does not want to go to the party since she does not have a dress for the party, so her husband gives her the money to buy her dress by giving up his next summer vacation. However, she is still not satisfied because she thinks that only dress looks awful, so she goes to her rich friend, ~~named~~ Mrs. Jeanne Forrestier ~~who is very rich and beautiful~~, to borrow her ~~superb~~ diamond necklace. At the party, Mathilde looks so beautiful and every men watch her and dance with her. Her husband comes to the place of the party to pick her up, and they go back to their home, but Mathilde found out that the necklace is not around her neck anymore. Her husband searches everywhere ~~with utmost effort~~, but he can not find it. He finally finds a shop where has a necklace of diamond that looks exactly the same, so he decides to buy it using the money that his father had left for him and borrowing the money (doesn't make sense). Mathilde takes the necklace to return to Mrs. Forrestier. Mathilde ~~thinks~~ ~~whether telling the truth is the best or not, and she~~ eventually decided not to speak the truth to (finish the sentence). ~~Mr. and Mrs. Loisel had a hardship in their life, and~~ it takes ten years to pay back the loan they have borrowed ~~back~~ for the necklace. Mathilde learns how to do a house work (Why?). She meets Mrs. Forrestier unexpectedly (after how many years?), and Mathilde finds out that the Mrs. Forrestier's necklace is not a real diamond necklace.

Kyorochan · Answer

Hello. Thank you for giving me some ideas. I correct some of your suggestions that you highlighted, but I still do not know how to correct the rest of them. Could you please give me a hint how to fix them? Thank you! I really appreciate your help.

Plot Summary: Necklace

Necklace is the story about a very poor woman's huge life changes by encountering a necklace. The woman, named Mathilde Loisel who is poor and married a clerk, is described as a pretty woman and trying to have a rich life delusion because of her cheap belongings. One day her husband receives a party invitation card for him and his wife, but Mathilde does not want to go to the party since she does not have a dress for the party, so her husband gives her the money to buy her dress giving up his next summer vacation. However, she is still not satisfied because she thinks that wearing only dress looks awful, so she goes to her rich friend, Mrs. Jeanne Forrestier, to borrow her diamond necklace. At the party, Mathilde looks so beautiful and every men watch her and dance with her. Her husband comes to the place of the party to pick her up, and they go back to their home, but Mathilde finds out that the necklace is not around her neck anymore. Her husband searches everywhere, but he can not find it. He finally finds a shop where sells a necklace of diamond that looks exactly the same, so he decides to buy it paying the money that his father had left for him and borrowing the money from someone. Mathilde takes the necklace to return to Mrs. Forrestier. Mathilde eventually decides not to tell the truth to. It takes ten years to pay back the loan they have borrowed for the necklace. Because the Loisels have to pay all the money and have a hardship in their life, Mathilde learns how to do a house work. She meets Mrs. Forrestier unexpectedly after the Loisels pay back all the money, and Mathilde finds out that the Mrs. Forrestier's necklace is not a real diamond necklace.

RayH · Answer

I've taken the liberty of rewriting a few of the problem sentences as a kind of guide as to the corrections needed in your writing.

kyorochanNecklace is the story about a very poor woman's huge life changes by encountering a necklace.

Necklace is the story of a very poor woman and the huge changes she goes through as a result of her encounter with a necklace.

kyorochanAt the party, Mathilde looks so beautiful and every men watch her and dance with her.

At the party Mathilde looks so beautiful that all the men notice her and want to dance with her.

kyorochan He finally finds a shop where sells a necklace of diamond that looks exactly the same, so he decides to buy it paying the money that his father had left for him and borrowing the money from someone.

He finally finds a shop which sells a diamond necklace that looks exactly like the one Mathilde lost and he decides to buy it using money he inherited from his father along with a loan to make up the difference.

These are not the only problems in your work but I hope they give you an idea of the kinds of changes you need to make. Obviously these are not the only possible rewrites, just my suggestions.

Don't forget that the sentences all fit into the larger context and can't be written or rewritten without keeping that context in mind. Be especially careful of tense, the use of articles, and maintaining the continuity of your summary.

Kyorochan · Answer

Thank you everyone!
Thank you for your suggestions! It really helped my what I need to focus on. I will keep in mind those things that you've told me.I really appreciate you help. Thank you very much!

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