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Mcbian Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

PLEASE CORRECT MY PARAGRAPH (NEWLY IN THIS FORUM)

Once we applied for the posts of Management Trainee in Local Bank. My friend and I sucessfully qualified the written exam and interview through Bank Panel Board. We were appointed as probationery Officer for about six months, after sucessful completion of our training that we were sent to the different branches to serve their duties properly.
  

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Once (Some time ago,) my friend and I (don't use a pronoun until you have established its identity) applied for the posts of Management Trainee in a l ocal b ank. (writer the Local Bank if that is the exact name of the bank) My friend and I sucessfully qualified by passing the written exam and having a positive interview with the through b ank 's p anel b oard. We were appointed as probationery o fficer s for about six months, and after sucessful completion of our training , that we were sent to the different branches to perform our duties properly.

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  • Once (Some time ago,) my friend and I (don't use a pronoun until you have established its identity) applied for the posts of Management Trainee in a l ocal b ank.
  • (writer the Local Bank if that is the exact name of the bank) My friend and I sucessfully qualified by passing the written exam and having a positive interview with the through b ank 's p anel b oard.
  • We were appointed as probationery o fficer s for about six months, and after sucessful completion of our training , that we were sent to the different branches to perform our duties properly.
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Once (Some time ago,) my friend and I (don't use a pronoun until you have established its identity) applied for the posts of Management Trainee in a local bank. (writer the Local Bank if that is the exact name of the bank) My friend and I sucessfully qualified by passing the written exam and having a positive interview with
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Thanks for correcting my paragraph, and expect your kind assistance farther.
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