Please correct my grammatical mistake if u found

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when i was in 12th. our school had organised a trip to goa.
we were around 100 people and we started our journey to goa from new delhi station by goa express. i and few of my friend are too excited.
all the day we were sharing the jokes and memorsing the old days. At night around 9 a clock we reached bhopal and from the station i buy two
bottles of mountain dew. when i reached to my sit i saw everyone was too tired. one of my friend switched off the light of my boogie and it was too dark
one of my friend has steel glasses and he poured the mountain dew into the glasses. Suddenly one of our junior came and
thought that we are drink alcohol. i said to him do u wanna drink and he repiled no. but forcelly we gave him a drink. after drinking the mountain dew
he run away. then we told the whole incident to our class teacher. then she told us to go back to seets.

after some time we saw ...our class teacher had catch the junior boy and coming to us. suddently teacher started scholding us and him.
teacher said to junior guys that these three will be blacklisted from school and you also. the junior guys start crying and said madam please forgive me
. i will never repeat this mistake again. then suddenly we 3 and madam were shout bakra.....

Obaidtariq · Accepted Answer

Glad that you have asked about the mistakes. Well you have done lot of grammatical mistakes and spelling mistakes. Last but not the least, the last sentence was little weird "suddenly we 3 and madam were shout bakra" , as you know that "bakra" [goat] is not an english word. I have analysed your passages and tried to minimized the mistakes as possible . thanks

Best regards,

Obaid

When I was in 12^th grade, our school had organised a trip to Goa. We were around 100 people and we started our journey to Goa from New Delhi station by Goa express. We all were very thrilled for the expedition. All day we shared plenty of jokes and memorising the good old days. At night around 9’O clock we reached Bhopal and from the station, I bought two bottles of 'mountain dew'.

When I reached my seat everyone was so tired and weary. It was so dark in the train because one of my friends switched off light in my compartment. After some time, friend poured down the drink 'Mountain Dew' to glasses. Suddenly, one of our junior came and thought that we are drinking alcohol. I said him to drink, but he replied "NO". We gave him the drink forcefully, after finishing the drink he run away. Afterwards, we told the whole incident to our class teacher and she told us to go back to seats.

After some time we saw our teacher and junior boy coming towards us, she started scolding us. Teacher told me and 2 junior students that we are going to be blacklisted from school. Junior students were started crying in front of the teacher and told her to forgive them and said “we will never repeat this mistake again”.

Frogfish · Answer

Please let me correct your mistakes,my friend,

i and few of my friend ~~are~~ too excited.I think you should use"were".
At night around 9 a clock we reached bhopal and from the station i ~~buy~~ two.I think you should use"bought".
Suddenly one of our junior came and thought that we ~~are drink~~ alcohol.You should use" we were drinking".
Spelling errors too

the junior guys ~~start~~ crying . You made mistakes here too. You should write " The junior guy started crying."

Very nice to read about your trip. Thank you very much for sharing your experience. Have a nice day.

Please correct my grammatical mistake if u found

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