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CoSmO_hk Posted 19 years ago
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00 00 00In recent years, one of the serious problems of Hong Kong is that too many mainland women come to 00 to have babies. Some people think that mainland pregnant women should not be allowed to give birth to their babies in 00 because it would cause a lot of social problems here.02br
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00 00First of all, some mainland pregnant women come to 00 to be born babies, but they do not pay the bills. It spends much money of local residents. Besides, they take up too much obstetric service, such as rooms. It makes local pregnant women cannot find a place to give birth and be completely served. Moreover, it will increase the population of 00. It goes without saying that 00 is very small, but the population is extremely high. If the government does not practice some policies to prevent that, it would cause a lot of social problems, such as housing, unemployment and using all public facilities. Thus, most people oppose it and hope that the government practice effective policies to enable to decrease non-local women to come 00 to have babies.02br
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00 00Nevertheless, however, these measures also cause some issues, such as discrimination, violating Basic Law. Furthermore, some private hospitals exactly face the financial problems of lack of income. Non-local women come to 00 to have babies, revenue of private hospitals would be increased. Finally, one of the serious problems of Hong Kong is that 00 lacks young labours. It can relieve the aging problem.02br
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00 00In my opinion, I agree practicing some measure to prevent mainland women from coming to Hong Kong to give birth, because too many mainland women come to 00 to have babies, but they do not pay the bills. It wastes too many facilities of 00. In addition, 00 population is very high. If these conditions still constantly happen, I cannot fancy what 00 is in future.0-
  

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02br 02br 00In recent years, one of the serious problems of Hong Kong is that too many mainland women come to Hong Kong to have babies. 02br 02br 00 First of all, some mainland pregnant women come to Hong Kong 01b 00to give birth02b 00, but they do not pay the bills. It 00spends00 much money of local residents.

  • 02br 02br 00In recent years, one of the serious problems of Hong Kong is that too many mainland women come to Hong Kong to have babies.
  • 02br 02br 00 First of all, some mainland pregnant women come to Hong Kong 01b 00to give birth02b 00, but they do not pay the bills.
  • It 00spends00 much money of local residents.
  • Besides, they take up too 01b 00many 02b 00obstetric 01b 00services02b 00, such as rooms.
  • It01b 00 means that02b 00 local pregnant women cannot find a place to give birth and be completely 00served00.
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0I've made a few corrections in bold and highlighted some other problem areas for you to try to fix.02br
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00Thank you very much~ I have fixed.Could you give me answers? please02br
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00In recent years, one of the serious problems of Hong Kong is that too many mainland women come to Hong Kong to have babies. Some people think that mainland pregnant women should not be allowed to give birth to their babies in Hong Kong bec

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