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Phumba2009 Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please correct my essay thanks my friends!!
About raining in my little town
Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad. That was at summer time. During the winter we had a lot of fun. Mostly when it was raining we as a kids were so happy I do not know why. Maybe it was because the sound of the storm, maybe it was because we as a family were together talking and laughing during the rain. I did really like when my cousins and me used to play making paper little boats and put them to float on the spots of water we use to have after the rain. The streets practically were flooded but not enough to cause a total flooding or some tragedy. But anyways we used the water coming down over the streets to play with paper boats. We put many little boats to float over the little rivers formed after the storm on the streets and we had always fun. That times I will not never forget.
Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad. That was at summer time. During the winter we had a lot of fun. Mostly when it was raining we as a kids were so happy I do not know why. Maybe it was because the sound of the storm, maybe it was because we as a family were together talking and laughing during the rain. I did really like when my cousins and me used to play making paper little boats and put them to float on the spots of water we use to have after the rain. The streets practically were flooded but not enough to cause a total flooding or some tragedy. But anyways we used the water coming down over the streets to play with paper boats. We put many little boats to float over the little rivers formed after the storm on the streets and we had always fun. That times I will not never forget.
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About raining in my little town Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad. That was at in summer time . During the winter, we had a lot of fun.
- About raining in my little town Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad.
- That was at in summer time .
- During the winter, we had a lot of fun.
- Mostly, when it was raining, we as a kids were so very happy I do not know why with no apparent reason.
- Maybe it was because of the sound of the storm, or maybe it was because we as a family were together talking and laughing during the rain.
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About raining in my little town
Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad. That wasat in summer time.
During the winter, we had a lot of fun. Mostly, when it was raining, we as a kids wereso very happy I do not know why with no apparent reason. Maybe it was because of the sound of the storm, or maybe it was because we
Sometimes the town where I was born looked a little sad. That was
During the winter, we had a lot of fun. Mostly, when it was raining, we as a kids were
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Hi 26TMNTJG2PG,
Could you please explain to me why you didn´t correct the indefinite article before the word kids (second paragraph, first line)?
I would also write seriously, instead of the word "serious" you used (the latter is only used in informal English - at least as far as I know...)
Could you please explain to me why you didn´t correct the indefinite article before the word kids (second paragraph, first line)?
I would also write seriously, instead of the word "serious" you used (the latter is only used in informal English - at least as far as I know...)
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DipsikCould you please explain to me why you didn´t correct the indefinite article before the word kids (second paragraph, first line)?
You are right the 'a' before 'kids' should not be there. I missed out. Thank you. The original poster, please note.
DipsikI would also write seriously, instead of the word "
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26TMNTJG2PG"The streetsThe parpracticallywere practically flooded but not serious enough to causea total flooding or someany tragedy" and you have a point here as 'seriously' will be another adverb modifying the verb 'were flooded' but I used the adjective there to be illiptical for 'the floods were not serious enough' to be natural.
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Hi 26TMNTJG2PG,
I can´t help but ask: Are you sure you know what "ellipsis" is actually about? (No offense) I´ve checked it out since I was not really sure myself, and found out the following:
ELLIPSIS means you can in fact omit a part of a sentence to cut it shorter and avoid repetition.
...the streets were flooded but (the streets were) not (flooded)
I can´t help but ask: Are you sure you know what "ellipsis" is actually about? (No offense) I´ve checked it out since I was not really sure myself, and found out the following:
ELLIPSIS means you can in fact omit a part of a sentence to cut it shorter and avoid repetition.
...the streets were flooded but (
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Dipsik...the streets were flooded but (the streets were)not (flooded)seriously enough to...
It can work this way also: ...the streets were flooded but
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Still, I don´t think ellipsis entitles you to omit a suffix that logically belongs to a word in a particular sentence.
I´m quite positive that the only correct form of the word in this paricular sentence is SERIOUSLY.
I´m quite positive that the only correct form of the word in this paricular sentence is SERIOUSLY.
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DipsikStill, I don´t think ellipsis entitles you to omit a suffix that logically belongs to a word in a particular sentence.
You seem to have learned or come across some rule/s how ellipsis should work.
Now, look at the following two adjoining sentences taken from a reference book compiled/contributed/edited by twelve experts in English, about ha
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