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TOPIC: Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out although people have noticed this problem for a long time. Why have people failed to improve this situation?                       ---------------------------------------------     Over the past few years, the massive disappearance of several species has seemed to be a controversially heated topic, which is largely attributed to an utter ignorance among people of this issue. My essay will present rationales behind this matter.      The first reason explaining this phenomenon is humans’ overdependence on natural resources. It goes without saying that a vast number of life aspects are closely interwoven with the nature, which is outstandingly shown by the fact that people undertake deforestation to address agricultural concerns, namely, widening harvesting area or softening soil, along with housing demands. An additional example is medicinal treatment from rarely precious herbs as well as animals such as horns of rhinoceros and elephants in many nations. Needless to say, these aforementioned instances are just a small drop in the ocean that are indicative of how severe humans’ devastation to the biodiversity is, albeit their full awareness.        Another main contributor to this unfortunate happening is fast – pacing feature of modern lifestyles. In the contemporary world, the civilization has been exposed to great worries, namely, gender equality, poverty or widespread ailments. In other words, it seems to human creatures that an overwhelming responsibility is waiting ahead for them to find a proper solving methodology towards these troubles, including environmental damage. Accordingly, it appears such a painstaking task to cope with all of them instantaneously, whereas, they require enormous time notwithstanding.         In conclusion, little effort has been done to prevent the mass extinction of species is an absolutely disappointing fact. Hopefully, in the distant future, joint unit on a global scale would occur to save thousands of innocent lives.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

Over the past few years, the massive disappearance of several species has seemed to be a controversially heated topic, which is largely attributed to an utter ignorance among people of this issue. My essay will present rationales behind this matter.

The extinction of wild species has accelerated in recent years despite people’s awareness of t

The extinction of wild species has accelerated in recent years despite people’s awareness of this problem. The world is losing a large number of animals and plants every year, and this irreversible loss will likely have disastrous consequences for the global environment and for our own survival. There are various reasons behind this unfortunate phenomenon.

The first reason for species extinction ~~explaining this phenomenon~~ is human overdependence on natural resources. It goes without saying that ~~a vast number of life~~ many aspects of our life are closely interwoven with ~~the~~ nature. For example, we cut down large areas of forest to get timber for construction and to make furniture. Moreover, millions of tons of fish and other marine species are caught every year for human consumption. which is outstandingly shown by the fact that people undertake deforestation to address agricultural concerns, namely, widening harvesting area or softening soil, along with housing demands. An additional example is medicinal treatment from rarely precious Furthermore, traditional medicine in some cultures uses rare herbs as well as animal parts such as the horns of rhinoceros and tusks of elephants, which directly threatens those species. in many nations. Needless to say, these aforementioned instances are just a small drop in the ocean that are indicative of how severe humans’ devastation to the biodiversity is, albeit their full awareness.

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Your second body paragraph is off topic and incoherent. Talk about loss of habitat instead. Search the web to learn about that if necessary. Revise your essay and repost it below if you wish. Remember to write clear and simple sentences.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

vutran2004has seemed to be a controversially heated topic,

Many essay writers memorize a response such as this. It will not earn you a good score.

Avoid writing ideas that you have memorized as a general answer to all opinion topics.
Open each essay with a statement that is focused on the substance of the topic.

vutran2004My essay will present rationales behind this matter.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows that you will present arguments; that is the entire purpose of an academic essay.

Instead, state your answer to the essay prompt. This is the main point of the entire essay.

vutran2004humans’ overdependence

Generally, "human" is not a natural substitute for people or "our".

Human is used in certain set phrases (human resources, human trafficking, and human rights), and in essays that have a context of **** sapiens as a biological species. For example, comparing artificial intelligence with human intelligence, or animals' forms of communications versus human forms of communication.

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