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The line chart compares changes in smoking rate of men and women in Someland and how these rates changed between 1960 and 2000.

Overall, the rate of smoking both gender decreased over the period of 60 years. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general decline, the smoking rate of men was higher than that of women.

From the highest point in 1960, the smoking rate of men started to decrease. Between 1970 and 2000, men's rate of smoking decreased rapidly by over 300 persons, falling to approximately 200 persons in 2000.

In comparison with the rate of smoking of men, that of women had a different trend. In the 1960 - 1975 period, the smoking rate of women increased continuously, to roughly 200 persons, which was its highest point during the 60-year period. However, from 1975 to 2000, the women's smoking rate had downward trend, dropping to 100 persons in 2000.

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Công Thành Phan The line chart compares changes in smoking rate of men and women in Someland and how these rates changed between 1960 and 2000.

It is a chart, but you don't call it a "line" chart. It is a line graph. "Between" suggests that the two years 1960 and 2000 are not included. The structure "from … to …" is better. "And how these rates changed" is redundant.

"The chart compares the smoking rates of men and women in Someland from 1960 to 2000."

Công Thành Phan Overall, the rate of smoking both gender decreased over the period of 60 years. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general decline, the smoking rate of men was higher than that of women.

People use "gender" nowadays instead of "***" to avoid offending some other people. Here, we have the two sexes, so we don't need to do that. It is actually 41 years. I might use "remained" instead of "was".

"Overall, the rate of smoking in both sexes decreased over the period of 41 years. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general decline, the smoking rate of men remained higher than that of women.

Công Thành Phan From the highest point in 1960, the smoking rate of men started to decrease. Between 1970 and 2000, men's rate of smoking decreased rapidly by over 300 persons, falling to approximately 200 persons in 2000.

Seems OK, except that for the men to be higher than the women at the end, they would ahve to fall to "just over 200".

Công Thành Phan In comparison with the rate of smoking of men, that of women had a different trend. In the 1960 - 1975 period, the smoking rate of women increased continuously, to roughly 200 persons, which was its highest point during the 60-year period. However, from 1975 to 2000, the women's smoking rate had downward trend, dropping to 100 persons in 2000.

Again, 41 years. You omitted an article. The women go up to 300, not 200, and they end at 200, not 100.

"In comparison with the rate of smoking of men, that of women had a different trend. In the 1960 - 1975 period, the smoking rate of women increased continuously, to roughly 300 persons, which was its highest point during the 41-year period. However, from 1975 to 2000, the women's smoking rate had a downward trend, dropping to 200 persons in 2000."

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