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Nik Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please, correct my essay.

Diabetes is the inability of our body to produce or use insulin. Symptoms of the disease include unexplained weight loss, tiredness, changes in vision, and so on. There are three types of diabetes. The first one of those is juvenile diabetes, which is characterized by an inability of the individual to produce insulin. Type 2 is the most common type and is connected to people being overweight and is usually the result of bad eating habits over a long period of time. The last type is gestational diabetes, which occurs in women who are pregnant. The diabetes is controlled with specific diet.

  

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I don't see any writing problems. I'd suggest breaking it appropriately into paragraphs. If you're going to specifically write "Type 2," then you ought to write "Type 1" as well.

— Avangi

  • I don't see any writing problems.
  • I'd suggest breaking it appropriately into paragraphs.
  • If you're going to specifically write "Type 2," then you ought to write "Type 1" as well.
  • Sometimes Type 1 is referred to as "insulin dependent" diabetes, since those afflicted have to shoot up or wear pumps.
  • You imply that this inability to produce insulin is characteristic of all diabetes.
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I don't see any writing problems.
I'd suggest breaking it appropriately into paragraphs.
If you're going to specifically write "Type 2," then you ought to write "Type 1" as well.
Sometimes Type 1 is referred to as "insulin dependent" diabetes, since those afflicted have to shoot up or wear pumps. You imply that this inability to produce insulin is characteristic of all diabetes. Are
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