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Lolokal Posted 17 years ago
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Please correct my essay

britsh researchers said that a number of people who living with cancer have witnessed a remarkable improvement in their health and life style after being treated with bacteria that is typically found in soil ...

researchers stated that this bacteria has properities help to overcome depression by stimulating the chemical substance of serotonin , that the reduction of this substance lead man to melancholy .

so the anti dipression drugs operate by stimulating the chemicals in the brain...
  

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why you didnt correct my essay
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lolokalbritsh researchers said that a number of people who living with cancer have witnessed a remarkable improvement in their health and life style after being treated with bacteria that is typically found in soil ...

researchers stated that this bacteria has properities help to overcome depression by stimulating the chemical substance of serotonin , that t
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thank you very much you really helpfull.

so could you please correct this essay ???

Athletic woman brings intellegent children :

Women who exercise running sport bring intelligent and healthy children, recent german study said.

This study stated that the bicycles riding sport is a recommended sport exercise during the last months of pregnancy due to the fact th
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Hi lolokal,


You have some errors.


We say "exercise" not "sport exercise."


Please tell me what these phrases mean:

exercise running sport -- do you mean simply "running"?

the bicycles riding sport -- do mean "bike riding"?

it promotes the pregnant -- I just don't know what you mean

brain movement`s purity -- I don't k
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HI I HAVE TRIED TO REPAIR IT . WHAT`S YOUR OPINION???

Athletic Women Have Intelligent Children :

Women who exercise are more likely to have intelligent and healthy children, a recent German study said.

This study stated that bicycle riding is a recommended exercise during the last months of pregnancy because it promotes the pregnant`s and fetus`s vitality and activity.
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Lolokal, I'm sorry,but "purity of the brain" and "fresh brain" still don't hae any meaning to me, and you need to try to say this another way too: the pregnant`s and fetus`s vitality and activity
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so can we say healthy brain ? and how we can say : it promotes the pregnant`s vitality and promotes the fetus vitality ?
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It would help me to help you if you tried to say it in another way.

It leads to a healthier pregnancy for the mother and increased blood flow for the baby... something like that.

As it is, I don't know how to tell you to rewrite it, because I don't know what you're trying to say.

Perhaps you want to change the part about riding a bicylce to riding a stationary bicycle.
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thanks that is really what i want to say...
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What do you mean by "the pregnant's vitality"? Do you mean the pregnant woman or the pregnancy?

By vitality do you mean "good health" - if so, then say so/

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