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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please correct my essay



The topic:

Recently,Education Secretary Michael Suen Ming-yeung has announced a proposal for adjustments to the medium-of-instruction policy.

Under the proposal, which gives greater flexibility to schools to decide their language policy,schools with 85 per cent of their Form One intake in the academic top 40 per cent wll be given total autonomy in deciding their langauage policies. They can conduct all their classes in English or opt for a mixed approach of offering both Chinese and English teaching.

Write an article for the school magazine discussing the reason and the pros and cons of the policy.End your article by giving suggestions,if any,on the issue.Give your article a title.

Mind your words
When we have enrolled the schools,what immediately enters our mind is the general english level.Now the reform once again doesn't suprise our pupils given by the past experience.Granted,as english is already an established common language among people all over the globe,the learning and mastering of english is doubtless an absolute advantage.In the colonized region converting the native langauage,different parts of profession requires a fluent english too.Nonetheless,neither plan nor investigation completed implied an inconceivable future.

Mending the shorts of present education policy,students needn't to face the extremely difficultied grammar regulations.Communication proficiency has been deepened,thereby the interating skills has upgraded.But on the other hand,the english speaker may also depressed by their poor knowledge relating to idiom and basic stuffs.As an example to elaborate,in the auguration speeches by Barack Obama,he repeatedly pledges to be a president.While some mayn't the reasons lest they might learnt by others immediately.

Only by learning and mastering the traditional english can refresh our immersed mind.A language has already been renewed myriads of time.Indeniably,the persisting attitudes are more vital to manage our speech correctly.As a short sentence to conclude,minding your words bit by bit should be paid in the daily life.

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It's the final stage to prepare the A-level examination.

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Top answer

Dear Anon: I read your essay. Sorry, but it does not follow your teacher's instructions at all. You did not discuss the pros and cons of the proposed change in policy.

  • Dear Anon: I read your essay.
  • Sorry, but it does not follow your teacher's instructions at all.
  • You did not discuss the pros and cons of the proposed change in policy.
  • You did not conclude with your suggestions on that issue.
  • Here are some things for you to consider - What is the issue?
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Dear Anon:
I read your essay. Sorry, but it does not follow your teacher's instructions at all. You did not discuss the pros and cons of the proposed change in policy. You did not conclude with your suggestions on that issue.
Here are some things for you to consider - What is the issue? What is the problem? Why did the Secretary propose a change in policy? Is your school affected or no
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Dear Sir/Madam,

L am delighted to view your precious retification.

To start with,l am totally agree with your comment.

And l am expected to learn how to write a essay with standard level.

Everytime l came back from school,large amounts of homework haven't finished.

How can l use 30 mintues to progress my essay?

Thanks for your help.
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Answer these questions:
What is the old policy?
What is the new policy?
Why did the secretary propose changes in the policy?
Do you agree with the changes?

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