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Kaizar Posted 19 years ago
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Please correct my email to a doctor

0 Dear Dr. Lydia02br
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00We recently found that one of our niece has a spine problem. She is 11 years old and we think she got scoliosis. We met a friend that recommend us to consult this problem with you. She also mentioned that you often come to Jakarta regularly. 02br
00If you don't mind, would you like to inform us when you will come to Jakarta. We hope to hear from you soon. Thank you.02br
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00Cordially, 0-
  

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0 Hi Kaizar02br 02br 00I have corrected only some obvious mistakes in your e-mail. A native speaker might want to make additional changes but I'll leave it up to you to decide about them. I understand that you may want your message to reflect Indonesian culture and ways and that's why I have left some expressions untouched even though they may not be very 'British' or 'American'.

— Cool Breeze

  • 0 Hi Kaizar02br 02br 00I have corrected only some obvious mistakes in your e-mail.
  • A native speaker might want to make additional changes but I'll leave it up to you to decide about them.
  • I understand that you may want your message to reflect Indonesian culture and ways and that's why I have left some expressions untouched even though they may not be very 'British' or 'American'.
  • Please choose one of the underlined alternatives.
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0 Hi Kaizar02br
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00I have corrected only some obvious mistakes in your e-mail. A native speaker might want to make additional changes but I'll leave it up to you to decide about them. I understand that you may want your message to reflect Indonesian culture and ways and that's why I have left some expressions untouched even though they may not be very 'British' or 'Americ
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0 Hi CB,02br
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00Thank you very much for your advice. I will choose as below:02br
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00Dear Dr. Lydia02br
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00We recently discovered that one of our nieces has a spine problem. She is 11 years old and we think she has got scoliosis. We met a friend who recommended consulting you about this problem. She also mentioned that you of
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0 Hi Kaizar02br
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00You're welcome. I don't usually do these corrections. There are two reasons: the are often posted by people who work for companies that should be able to afford translators, and reason No. 2 is the fact that many native speakers have a better knowledge of the suitable phrases and expressions for letters like yours.02br
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00I made
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0 Hi CB,02br
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00I think all of you are very helpful person, that's why I join this forum. I'm really appreciated.02br
00The Blue Diamond... I ever heard about them but I didn't pay any attention to what they had been doing in Finland because I was still very young, I was born in the late of 60's.02br
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00ps: please correct my sentences a
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10I think 11u10all of you/you all12u10 are very helpful person11font10s12font10/11font10people12font10, that's why I 11font10have12font
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0 Hahaha... you are right! Thank you for your correction. Actually I would like to express that I didn't pay attention to any activities what Blue Diamonds were doing after I was born but I was sure the Blue Diamonds were still exist around 70's. 02br
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00Regards,02br
00Kaizar 0-
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