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Kane159 Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please correct my article

Hi,
is the following excerpt correct?

When I saw her wearing a new dress she had bought,I could not take my eyes off her. My heart beat fast and I realized,once again,that she was my heart´s desire. She was so perfect,so gorgeous and without any flaw. It dawned on me that all we had ever experienced since our childhood had also changed the way I was thinking about her now. I wondered how come that this girl was still without a boyfriend. No wonder she had been being asked out so much lately.

Thank you in advance!
  

Top answer

Leave a space after a comma and all other punctuation marks. When I saw her wearing a new dress she had bought, I could not take my eyes off her. My heart beat fast and I realized, once again, that she was my heart´s desire.

  • Leave a space after a comma and all other punctuation marks.
  • When I saw her wearing a new dress she had bought, I could not take my eyes off her.
  • My heart beat fast and I realized, once again, that she was my heart´s desire.
  • She was so perfect and so gorgeous.
  • It dawned on me that all we had ever experienced since our childhood had also changed the way I was thinking about her now.
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Leave a space after a comma and all other punctuation marks.

When I saw her wearing a new dress she had bought, I could not take my eyes off her. My heart beat fast and I realized, once again, that she was my heart´s desire. She was so perfect and so gorgeous. It dawned on me that all we had ever experienced since our childhood had also changed the way I was thinking

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