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The line chart below illustrates the number of cars owned by household in Great Britain in a period of 16 years.
It is clear that there was a least number of citizens possessing three or more cars, while most of others had only one.

In 1971, about half of people living in Britain had no car. Comparing to the number of more-than-two-car owners, these numbers accounted for just only 10 percent, and the other belonged to people with one car. The significant rise in the number of two cars ownership was witnessed in the given period, from less than 10 percent in 1971 to more than 25 percent in 2007. The number of household possessing three cars or more shared the same property which was the slight increase to under 10 percent in 2007.
On the other hand, there was a drop in the number of zero-car owner, from 50 percent at the beginning to a half, 25 percent in 2007. Whereas, a majority of residents had only one car, and the number of them, although a small fluctuation happened, still remained the same, around 45 percent of British.

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The line chart below illustrates the number of cars owned by household in Great Britain in a period of 16 years.
It is clear that there was a least number of citizens possessing three or more cars, while most of others had only one.

In 1971, about half of people living in Britain had no car. Comparing to the number of more-than-two-car owners, these numbers accounted for just only 10 percent, and the other belonged to people with one car. The significant rise in the number of two cars ownership was seen in the given period, from less than 10 percent in 1971 to more than 25 percent in 2007. The number of household possessing three cars or more shared the same property which was the slight increase to under 10 percent in 2007.
On the other hand, there was a drop in the number of zero-car owner, from 50 percent at the beginning to a half, 25 percent in 2007. Whereas, a majority of residents had only one car, and the number of them, although a small fluctuation happened, still remained the same, around 45 percent of British.

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The line chart ~~below~~ illustrates (wrong word) the number of cars owned by household (wrong form) in Great Britain in a period of 16 years. (What 16 years? Give the year range. That is not a good description of this graph. The units are not number of cars, but percentages.)

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The line graph plots the percentage of British households which owned a given number of cars during the period from 1971 to 2007. There are four curves on the graph indicating car ownership: no cars, one car, two cars and three or more.

The line graph shows the trends in household car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Specifically, it gives the percentages of families who had no car and compares that with one-car families, two-car families and families in which there were three or more cars.

The percentages of British households with no car, one car, two cars and three or more cars are the four curves plotted on this line graph. The data is from 1971 through 2007.

~~It is clear that~~ there was a least number of citizens (wrong expression ) possessing three or more cars, while most of others had only one.

In 1971, about half of people (wrong expression ) living in Britain had no car. Comparing to the number (wrong word. A number would be something like 25 million. The graph does not plot numbers of households. ) of more-than-two-car owners, these ~~numbers~~ accounted for just only 10 percent, and the other (??) belonged to people with one car. The significant rise in the number of two cars ownership (wrong expression ) was witnessed (wrong word. Avoid "witness, see or experience" in Task 1. Numbers cannot witness things. Only living creatures do this.) in the given period, from less than 10 percent in 1971 to more than 25 percent in 2007. The number of household (wrong form) possessing three cars or more shared the same property (??) which was a ~~the~~ slight increase to ~~under 10~~ about 8 percent in 2007.
On the other hand, there was a drop in the number of zero-car owner, (wrong expression ) from 50 percent at the beginning to ~~a half,~~ 25 percent in 2007. Whereas, a majority (Wrong word. Majority means more than 50%.) of residents had only one car, and the number of them, although a small fluctuation (not the best word choice) happened, still remained the same, around 45 percent of British households. (The percentage of one-car households was relatively constant over the period, varying between 42 and 46%. Except for the period 1971-1976, it was the category with the highest percentages. )

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