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Topic: Some jobs require employees to get up early in the morning to start the day’s work. Other jobs require employees to get up later in the day and work until late at night.

Which work style do you think is better? Why?

Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

Different occupations request for different timetables and work-shifts. Some of them ask the workers to start a workday as early as possible, while others allow workers to get up late and do the night-shifts. In my opinion, I prefer working in the early morning so that I can stay healthy, work efficiently, and have more well-spent time for my family and friends.

First of all, working early can help to protect your health both physically and mentally. In terms of physical health, staying at work late may cause bodily exhaustion, as people tend to get tired much easier at night. Moreover, working late also means that you do not have time to prepare your dinner well and eat late. Many scientists have proved that midnight snacks will cause a detrimental effect on your health, for example, you will at risk of having obesity and numerous other diseases like diabetes or cancer. Besides, the later you work, the more chances you get stressed, which will harm your mental condition.

Second, I feel more energetic and concentrated while working in the morning, as a result, my productivity is much improved. I believe that morning is an ideal time to do the jobs which require absorbing and analyzing lots of knowledge and new information as mine. In addition, I cannot think straightly and come up with creative ideas when working too late; instead, I always feel bored and exhausted.

Finally, I would rather spend my night time with my family and friends than with businesses. Having dinners with family or friends, which there is no stress and deadline, is much worthy and fulfilling than having some fast foods alone at the workplace. Also, it is my precious time to relax and share moments with my beloved ones so I can balance my work-life and I do not want to let anything related to business interrupt.

In conclusion, I insist on working early in the morning because of the many benefits it leads to. It is highly recommended that all workers should take the morning shifts in order to protect the health, work productively and have more personal time.