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Please correct grammar and vocabulary mistakes!
Can somebody read this essay and correct my grammar and vocabulary mistakes. I would say my grammar is considerably weak as I never studied English grammar, rather I learnt English from speaking on a day to day basis. For the vocabulary, all the bombastic words I have tried to fit inside are mainly learnt from reading my father's books. Please do not think that I am showing off trying to write with these flashy words.Normally i do not force myself to use flashy words but I really want to learn the proper way how to use these words so please correct my usage so that i don't make any mistakes or incorrectly use words. (Please ignore the story, i know it sounds immature but i just needed a body to practice the words)
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Once upon a time, there was a kingdom in the occidental world known for its vast dominions, which stretched from Europe to Asia. A ruthless and dogmatic autocrat ruled the kingdom. This despot dictated his people with an iron fist and a blithe disregard for their eudamonia. He considered himself a celestial deity and compelled everyone to prostrate in his presence. The hoi polloi abhorred this constrained idolatry but were always apprehensive of voicing out their aspersions. This is because this tyrant had zero tolerance for remonstration. In his eyes, it was an impious act that could not be propitiated and the perpetrators were to be condemned to perdition. The consequences of blasphemy were entrenched into a draconian law code, which was the arbiter of public obedience, or some may look at it as a travesty of justice. Many of his transgressions include purging and executing ministers who he deemed perfidious, contorting rules to his favour and leaving his people suffering in abject austerity.
Alas, resentment had reached its zenith and the people staged a mass rebellion, which ultimately left an indelible mark on the kingdom’s epoch. Many people ascribed the success of the revolt to the rise of the bourgeoisie class, which fought ardently with great fortitude for autonomy. The conception behind the rebellion was fueled by public exhortations from eminent rebels. Another factor that was fundamental was successful tactical espionage and government infiltration. Consequently, the king capitulated to his demise when his citadel was beleaguered after 3 months and he was forced to abdicate his throne and succumb to a public lunch, which was met with scenes of delirium. Liberation was paradisiacal and marked the end of the monarchy system. The general exalted himself as leader of the new people’s republic. Good tidings percolated around the world over the bright posterity of the new republic.
Nevertheless, joy was merely ephemeral as a new nadir had ensued and eclipsed the euphoria. Ironically, the new military regime was a portent of new malady, which had bestowed the land. The general was not unlike the king. His totalitarian military regime and nepotism ensured his family’s total control over the kingdom. Thus, a new dawn of social wanton had emerged under a new maverick.
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Once upon a time, there was a kingdom in the occidental world known for its vast dominions, which stretched from Europe to Asia. A ruthless and dogmatic autocrat ruled the kingdom. This despot dictated his people with an iron fist and a blithe disregard for their eudamonia. He considered himself a celestial deity and compelled everyone to prostrate in his presence. The hoi polloi abhorred this constrained idolatry but were always apprehensive of voicing out their aspersions. This is because this tyrant had zero tolerance for remonstration. In his eyes, it was an impious act that could not be propitiated and the perpetrators were to be condemned to perdition. The consequences of blasphemy were entrenched into a draconian law code, which was the arbiter of public obedience, or some may look at it as a travesty of justice. Many of his transgressions include purging and executing ministers who he deemed perfidious, contorting rules to his favour and leaving his people suffering in abject austerity.
Alas, resentment had reached its zenith and the people staged a mass rebellion, which ultimately left an indelible mark on the kingdom’s epoch. Many people ascribed the success of the revolt to the rise of the bourgeoisie class, which fought ardently with great fortitude for autonomy. The conception behind the rebellion was fueled by public exhortations from eminent rebels. Another factor that was fundamental was successful tactical espionage and government infiltration. Consequently, the king capitulated to his demise when his citadel was beleaguered after 3 months and he was forced to abdicate his throne and succumb to a public lunch, which was met with scenes of delirium. Liberation was paradisiacal and marked the end of the monarchy system. The general exalted himself as leader of the new people’s republic. Good tidings percolated around the world over the bright posterity of the new republic.
Nevertheless, joy was merely ephemeral as a new nadir had ensued and eclipsed the euphoria. Ironically, the new military regime was a portent of new malady, which had bestowed the land. The general was not unlike the king. His totalitarian military regime and nepotism ensured his family’s total control over the kingdom. Thus, a new dawn of social wanton had emerged under a new maverick.
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With the best of intentions of assisting you, I read and analysed your text thoroughly. I have never seen a more bombastic set of paragraphs in my life. Whatever point you are trying to make eludes me.
- With the best of intentions of assisting you, I read and analysed your text thoroughly.
- I have never seen a more bombastic set of paragraphs in my life.
- Whatever point you are trying to make eludes me.
- It's obvious you know the meaning of each and every word you have written, but I fail to see why you have done so and why you would ask for help from people who come here to volunteer their time to help others who are trying to learn and progress in a second language.
- John
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With the best of intentions of assisting you, I read and analysed your text thoroughly.
I have never seen a more bombastic set of paragraphs in my life.
Whatever point you are trying to make eludes me. It's obvious you know the meaning of each and every word you have written, but I fail to see why you have done so and why you would ask for help from people who come here to volun
I have never seen a more bombastic set of paragraphs in my life.
Whatever point you are trying to make eludes me. It's obvious you know the meaning of each and every word you have written, but I fail to see why you have done so and why you would ask for help from people who come here to volun
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Dear John,
With all due respect, this sort of attitude is the reason why people do not progress when it comes to learning the language. Everyone is satisfied just knowing enough to get by. As part of an english forum, I assumed that I could get help learning how to use the words in appropriate context. I consider my grammar weak because I do not have the luxury of learning Englis
With all due respect, this sort of attitude is the reason why people do not progress when it comes to learning the language. Everyone is satisfied just knowing enough to get by. As part of an english forum, I assumed that I could get help learning how to use the words in appropriate context. I consider my grammar weak because I do not have the luxury of learning Englis
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