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I am Dony, student of Engineering Faculty in Malang at the Brawijaya University. With this letter I would like to express my strong interest for participation at your Student Exchange Programme in the JAYCTS 2015. As a Indonesia's student, I plan to build an international career in the field of electrical engineering and acquaint Indonesia's culture in the Japan. Capability social balance and the necessity to gain an international experience outside my University make me a proper candidate for this position.


I have done an internship for about one year at a electrical engineering in Malang. During that placement, I have mastered skills like: physics and math basic, cause i have worked as math and physic private tutor at a lot international senior high school. Working with people has broadened my communication talent and I learnt how to handle different characters in very short time. Furthermore i have saved my fee for pay my school and go to Japan study exchange, cause my parents can not payed all my necessary.


During my studies, I have been a student representative. I was chosen at the Parahita’s elections for two years in a row as secretary. My responsibilities, as a representative included: organizing term exams, social gathering and creativity events. Those assignments enabled me to develop strong organization skills and help patient of lupus, taking into account the needs of my Parahita. Also, as a student of Brawijaya University I discovered the usefulness of team work, especially in laboratory conditions. Only with quality team work great achievement can be richen, and I am have a strong will to pursuit that goal.


Thank you very much in advanced for this opportunity. I am convinced that I will find a place in all the activities anticipated by your program.


Sincerely


Dony Darmawan Putra
  

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I am an engineering student Dony, student of Engineering Faculty in Malang at the at Brawijaya University , Malang, Indonesia . With this letter I would like to express my strong interest in participating in for participation at your Student Exchange Programme in the JAYCTS 2015. As a Indonesia's student, I plan My goals in life are to build an international career in the field of electrical engineering and to help in promoting cross-cultural links between Indonesia and Japan.

  • I am an engineering student Dony, student of Engineering Faculty in Malang at the at Brawijaya University , Malang, Indonesia .
  • With this letter I would like to express my strong interest in participating in for participation at your Student Exchange Programme in the JAYCTS 2015.
  • As a Indonesia's student, I plan My goals in life are to build an international career in the field of electrical engineering and to help in promoting cross-cultural links between Indonesia and Japan.
  • acquaint Indonesia's culture in the Japan.
  • I believe that my academic c apability, good social skills balance and the necessity eagerness to gain an international experience outside my u niversity make me a proper suitable candidate for this position.
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I am an engineering student Dony, student of Engineering Faculty in Malang at the at Brawijaya University, Malang, Indonesia. With this letter I would like to express my strong interest in participating in for participation at your Student Exchange Programme in the JAYCTS 2015. As a Indonesia's student, I plan My goals in life are to bui

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