Please comment on my letter

Topic: You are looking through a job database online and see a position you are interested in for managing a local tutoring service.
Person needed to manage a group of tutors. Have skills in administration and education as well as possess excellent communication abilities. Please e-mail a letter and your CV to Email Removed">Email Removed
Describe in your cover letter why you are interested in the position and any relevant experience and skills you possess.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the position of Leading Manager for a local tutoring service, as advertised in last week’s Career Builder website on 31^st October.

As outlined in my curriculum vitae, which I have enclosed, I attended the University of Languages and International Studies where I successfully completed my GCSE and “A” Level studies. In 2012, I graduated from Cambridge University with an MSc in Business Administration, as well as obtained 8.5 IELTS certificate during my studying process.

After graduation, I took over the position as Subject Specialist in English at ESE Institution, where my duties involved guiding the learning process towards the achievement of curriculum goals, as well as established transparent objectives for all lessons and projects for learners. I was also responsible for employing a variety of instructional techniques and boosting the capabilities of each individual or student group involved. Since I was gradually noted for my good organizational and managerial skills, I got a promotion to Leadership in terms of administering development-related projects of this organization. Not only did I have to strive towards running the educational projects effectively but also create solidarity and convenient working conditions for employees. Not until 2015 did I make a decision to pursue my passion and obtain my current position.

I am currently employed as an Administration Manager for the Army Reserve institution, where my responsibility includes both training and supervising staff in organizational policies and procedures. Furthermore, I also held the position which managing successful logistical outcomes through implementation of personally developed strategies to meet organizational goals.

I am especially keen to work with an organization such as yours which has a reputation for a group of well-qualified employees and numerous opportunities to improve academic development when it comes to administrative techniques. I believe that I would be an ideal candidate for the position you have outlined, as I have already excelled in administrative skills based on my three-year experience. My precious time spent on Army Reserve Institution proved that I accomplished management competence and had the ability to operate multitasks at the same time. Moreover, working as a Subject Specialist assisted me to gain deeper insight into education skills such as mastering information technology, providing high quality of each lesson and learning material, as well as learn how to become a well-organized and self-discipline individual. Importantly, being a Leadership made me escape from shyness and become more self-confident in interaction. In order to the best leader, I always make great effort to provide valuable training experience, create productive working environment, and giving support for subordinates through my outstanding communication abilities, which I understand to be a requirement of the position.

I enclose my curriculum vitae and photograph as requested, and I would be pleased to supply you with any further details should they be required. I thank you for considering my application and am willing to attend an interview at any time.