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Topic: in some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university. After graduating in high school some students choose go to trip or work before keep going to university. In my view, this has both advantage and disadvantage. First and foremost, people should recognize that students who going to travel or getting a job before keep study in university will start real job later than other people. Many people after come back trip or work, they instead of learning in university. This lead to they hard to keep receive from teacher and losing time when they travel also make them start to a career late after graduation. Other important point i would want to make is that if you want go to travel, you must spend a amount of money which not everyone has enough. An example, a student can borrow amount of money to travel from bank, but after they must work to return that money. On the other hand, the advantage of taking a year off before going to university is very clear. Firstly, choosing go to work or travel will bring chances to them to gain some valuable experience which never can find in university. An example, students choose go to work or trip has many real experience about things them learn in high school then apply to your career in future. Lastly, having time to work or travel help student clearly defined favorite job. This mean that period of time spend to work or travel before come back university never wasted. In my conclusion, i put more highlight on the idea that choosing to work or travel before going to university has both negative and benefit, so you should be sure with your decision.