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Letter Writing
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Hello, friends from EnglishForward! I’m currently applying for American colleges. Here is a letter to my ex-English teacher, Bridget. I checked the letter a few times, but I’m still not sure if it's OK to send it to her.
Please check it through. See if there's any mistake or inappropriate use. I'm waiting on-line. Thank you!
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Bridget,
How are you? I’m Shan from Shiyan middle school, do you remember me? I’ve read your letter to us, congratulations for your newborn baby! I can’t wait to see the baby! (I’m not sure it’s a her or a him, sorry~) I heard from my classmate that you had gone back to England, so I just write to you by e-mail.
I’m a little embraced about what I’m going to say. I know you are very, very busy now. But here is the thing: I’m planning to go to America for college, most of the schools require one or two recommendation letters, and I really want you to write this letter. It’s a little hasty, for the letter need to be sent out before Oct.1, the deadline of international applications.
If you don’t have time, I totally understand. I know taking care of a baby is not an easy job, and you must have your own work to do.
If your answer is “OK, let’s see…” then I don’t know what to say… I mean, that would be great!
I’m waiting for your apply, if your answer is yes, I will send you my address and other details. I’m in charge of all the expenses.
Please check it through. See if there's any mistake or inappropriate use. I'm waiting on-line. Thank you!
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Bridget,
How are you? I’m Shan from Shiyan middle school, do you remember me? I’ve read your letter to us, congratulations for your newborn baby! I can’t wait to see the baby! (I’m not sure it’s a her or a him, sorry~) I heard from my classmate that you had gone back to England, so I just write to you by e-mail.
I’m a little embraced about what I’m going to say. I know you are very, very busy now. But here is the thing: I’m planning to go to America for college, most of the schools require one or two recommendation letters, and I really want you to write this letter. It’s a little hasty, for the letter need to be sent out before Oct.1, the deadline of international applications.
If you don’t have time, I totally understand. I know taking care of a baby is not an easy job, and you must have your own work to do.
If your answer is “OK, let’s see…” then I don’t know what to say… I mean, that would be great!
I’m waiting for your apply, if your answer is yes, I will send you my address and other details. I’m in charge of all the expenses.
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Not bad at all. Couple of errors Embarrassed not embraced. whatever) Finish off with a thank you.
- Not bad at all.
- Couple of errors Embarrassed not embraced.
- whatever) Finish off with a thank you.
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Not bad at all. Couple of errors
Embarrassed not embraced.
urgent not hasty
I'd leave out I'm waiting for your apply (apply is wrong word anyway and it sounds a little pushy)
I'm in charge of the expenses would be better expressed as 'I will, of course, pay any expenses you incur.'
It might be nice to say why you want her to write the letter (give her
Embarrassed not embraced.
urgent not hasty
I'd leave out I'm waiting for your apply (apply is wrong word anyway and it sounds a little pushy)
I'm in charge of the expenses would be better expressed as 'I will, of course, pay any expenses you incur.'
It might be nice to say why you want her to write the letter (give her
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Thank you Nona! I’ve corrected the errors.
There’s something I feel confused. You wrote "I'd leave out I'm waiting for your apply". (“apply" is a typo, oops) so I could say " I’d leave out for your reply." ? Or the correct sentence is “I'd leave out I'm waiting for your reply”?
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Sorry I confused you there.
I meant that you shoud not include the sentence 'I'm waiting for your reply' as it sounds as though you are saying 'hurry up and do it' to her, which is a little rude to someone with a new baby! It gives the impression that you are impatient about her writing back quickly.
Perhaps you could say 'I look forward to your reply' if you really want to say
I meant that you shoud not include the sentence 'I'm waiting for your reply' as it sounds as though you are saying 'hurry up and do it' to her, which is a little rude to someone with a new baby! It gives the impression that you are impatient about her writing back quickly.
Perhaps you could say 'I look forward to your reply' if you really want to say
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