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Lokon Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Please check this short passage.

I've studied for a long time, and I've noticed that everytime when he has committed a rape, there are common points among those cases. First, it happened after raining, and the victims were those who had just finished with devotion to god.

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Here are a few suggestions: I've studied his modus operandi for a long time, and I've noticed that every time (2 words) when he has committed a rape, there were (change in tense) are points in common points among those cases (better: it was according to a predictable pattern) . First, it happened after a rain raining , and the victims were those who had just finished their with devotion s to G od.

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  • Here are a few suggestions: I've studied his modus operandi for a long time, and I've noticed that every time (2 words) when he has committed a rape, there were (change in tense) are points in common points among those cases (better: it was according to a predictable pattern) .
  • First, it happened after a rain raining , and the victims were those who had just finished their with devotion s to G od.
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Here are a few suggestions:

I've studied his modus operandi for a long time, and I've noticed that every time (2 words) when he has committed a rape, there were (change in tense) are points in common points among those cases (better: it was according to a predictable pattern). First, it happened after
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Thanks, AEmotion: starS. Your suggestions sounds good to me.
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