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Ahn Posted 19 years ago
Grammar

Please check this sentence.

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00 The original sentence is following one. It's from 'Newsweek'.02br
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01b00"With a per capita income of $2,750 a year, Thailand represents a class of nations that could put a huge dent in drug-company profits"02b02br
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00But I had to repharse this sentence02br
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01b00"Its national income per head being $2.750 a year, Thailand is a representative case of making the companies' profit plummet."02b02br
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00(In this sentence, 'the companies' refer to 'drug companies' )02br
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00Are there any grammatical ill-formed parts or unnatural parts in my sentence?0-
  

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0Hi01font 00,02font 02br 02br 01font 00The original sentence is following one. "02font 02b 02br 02br 01font 00(In this sentence, 'the companies' refer to 'drug companies' )02font 02br 02br 01font 00Are there any grammatical ill-formed parts or unnatural parts in my sentence? 02font 00Yes, the part in 01font 00red02font 00 is awkward.

— Clive

  • 0Hi01font 00,02font 02br 02br 01font 00The original sentence is following one.
  • "02font 02b 02br 02br 01font 00(In this sentence, 'the companies' refer to 'drug companies' )02font 02br 02br 01font 00Are there any grammatical ill-formed parts or unnatural parts in my sentence?
  • 02font 00Yes, the part in 01font 00red02font 00 is awkward.
  • 02br 02br 00Best wishes, Clive0-
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0Hi01font00,02font02br
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01font00The original sentence is following one. It's from 'Newsweek'.02font02br
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01b01font00"With a per capita income of $2,750 a year, Thailand represents a class of nations that could put a huge dent in drug-compa
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0Then, how about this?02br
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00"Its national income per head being $2.750, Thailand is a representative case that can make the companies' profit plummet."0-
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0H,02br
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00You haven't made clear 01i00what02i00 Thailand represents, ie a group or class of nations.02br
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00Best wishes, Clive0-
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00I see.02br
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00"Its national income per head being $2.750, Thailand is 01b00a representative case of a nation02b00 that can make the companies' profit plummet"02br
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00How about this? 0-
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0Hi,02br
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00Much better.02br
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00You might also say 01font00. . . Thailand is 01b00a representative example of those nations02b00 that can make the companies' profit plummet"02font02br
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00Best wishes, Clive0-
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0I finally passed 05002br
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00By the way I like the sentence you wrote. I'll use it.02br
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00Thank you,.010id54
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10Hi11font10,12font12br
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11font10The original sentence is following one. It's from 'Newsweek'.12font12br
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11b11font10"With a per capita income of $2
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0Hi Yoong Liat,02br
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01font00(In this sentence, 'the companies' 01b00refer02b00 to 'drug companies' ) I think 'refers' should be used instead. Am I correct?02font02br
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00Yes, you are.02br
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00I know that posters usually like it if we correct the English in which they
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0 Thanks, Clive, for the confirmation. 0-
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