Please check this Letter of Motivation for me!!!!

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00I need your help correcting the letter that I wrote to get a supervisor professor acceptance to continue my studies in one of the german Univesities.02br
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00Thank you in advance.02br
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01i00And bellow is my letter:02i02br
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00Dear Prof. Dr. X,02br
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00I'm Hatem-m, form YY.02br
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00I studied at the University of XXX in the period from 2000 to 2004, and acquired a diploma in Software Engineering in September 2004.02br
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00On February 2006, I have got a scholarship from XXX University, to continue doctoral studies in the domain of DBMS.02br
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00The University of XXX will support me financially during the period of my study, and as a first step to continue my studies in Germany I need to get an acceptance form a professor to be my supervisor in the domain I should specialized in i.e. DBMS, however I don't exactly know when the University will delegate me, but of course getting the acceptance will quicken the process.02br
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00Really I have a great hope to continue my studies in Germany, and I have chosen the domain of DBMS-specifically D-DBMS, because I have a great interest for it.02br
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00I'm looking forward to your help and advice.02br
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00I'm grateful for you and thank you very much.02br
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00Yours faithfully02br
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00Hatem-m02br
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