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Nonodiv Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please check this essay

Hi guys, iam having the final exam tomorrow. I need someone to find the grammatical and puncuation mistakes I made
Her is my draft:
An election is an event in which people make a choice to select their representatives. There are many authorities that held election like organizations and governments. An election must be fair and free, otherwise the responsible committee will cancel this process. The process for a national election lasts nearly 3 months.

A party must be held to make candidates announce their electoral calender to the people. Each candidate should provide a speech to the people about his electoral program. This party must provide sufficient security to save candidates and people from any breach. This party must also be for all people of the state. At the end of the party, everyone should recieve publication on election's requirements.

Before the day of election, damaged voting booths must be repared or replaced. Also, planning and preparation for the election day's phones must be performed. Moreover, we need to prepare supplies and logistics for our drop of site. Finally, stress staffs must be called to record the election events. Thus, the election's site will be ready for use.

In the morning of the election day, everyone must recieve a leaflet on the deadlines of the registration for voting, where it will be held and when the results will be published. After the voting process finish, several staffs are needed to clean the place and repair damaged things.
  

Top answer

nonodiv An election is an event in which people make a choice to select their representatives. It is somewhat wordy. Would be easier as: An election is an event in which people choose their representatives.

  • nonodiv An election is an event in which people make a choice to select their representatives.
  • It is somewhat wordy.
  • Would be easier as: An election is an event in which people choose their representatives.
  • nonodiv There are many authorities that held election There are many authorities that hold elections nonodiv like organizations and governments.
  • This use of organisations is vague, because, it does not express what kind of organisations hold elections.
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nonodivAn election is an event in which people make a choice to select their representatives.
It is somewhat wordy. Would be easier as: An election is an event in which people choose their representatives.
nonodivThere are many authorities that held election
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What about the rest of the essay?
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nonodivA party must be held to make candidates announce their electoral calender to the people.
The meaning of this is unclear. Candidates for political elections often join political parties. Is that what you mean?
nonodivEach candidate should provide a speech
Each cand

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