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RGCC Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please check these paragraphs
hi! i would really appreciate it if you could help me with these paragraphs, check the grammars and which paragraph is better. or you could also suggest other ways of constructing the paragraph. thank you so much!!!
A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had seen the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
B. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land has been extraordinary. We had the rare chance to step into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had the great opportunity to see the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
C. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We saw the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had seen the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
B. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land has been extraordinary. We had the rare chance to step into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We had the great opportunity to see the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
C. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied in the Bible. We saw the places where heaven came down to earth and left the lasting marks of divinity. Our Holy Land experience truly is an experience of a lifetime.
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Hi I would like to make a whack at it, but I am not a native speaker. A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary.
- Hi I would like to make a whack at it, but I am not a native speaker.
- A.
- Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary.
- We had [no need for past perfect; use past simple: we stepped] stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied [ perhaps 'discussed' ] in the Bible.
- ] and left the lasting marks of divinity.
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I would like to make a whack at it, but I am not a native speaker.
A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had [no need for past perfect; use past simple: we stepped] stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied [perhaps 'discussed'] in the Bible. We had seen [we saw] the places where
I would like to make a whack at it, but I am not a native speaker.
A. Our pilgrimage to the Holy Land was extraordinary. We had [no need for past perfect; use past simple: we stepped] stepped into the Bibleland-- the places that have been read about, spoken of, and studied [perhaps 'discussed'] in the Bible. We had seen [we saw] the places where
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