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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Please check the grammar
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Could you please check the grammar in these sentences?
Health centre launches new information campaign which is slightly unusual in the field of medicine. During the campaign the public, through a healthy touch of a humor, will be reminded to remember the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining the quality of life, as well as receive information about the latest technologies and possibilities offered by the in the modern medicine and beauty industry and reminded that sometimes it is advisable to visit the doctor not only for the sake of your own wellness, but also for the wellness of those people who are close to you.
Thank you a lot!
Could you please check the grammar in these sentences?
Health centre launches new information campaign which is slightly unusual in the field of medicine. During the campaign the public, through a healthy touch of a humor, will be reminded to remember the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining the quality of life, as well as receive information about the latest technologies and possibilities offered by the in the modern medicine and beauty industry and reminded that sometimes it is advisable to visit the doctor not only for the sake of your own wellness, but also for the wellness of those people who are close to you.
Thank you a lot!
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You need to learn to self-edit by deleting unnecessary verbiage: The health centre is launching an unusual information campaign to remind the public, through a healthy touch of humor, of the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining quality of life, to present information about the latest technologies and methods in the modern medicine and beauty industry, and to explain the importance of regular checkups not only for our own wellness but also for the wellness of those close to us.
- You need to learn to self-edit by deleting unnecessary verbiage: The health centre is launching an unusual information campaign to remind the public, through a healthy touch of humor, of the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining quality of life, to present information about the latest technologies and methods in the modern medicine and beauty industry, and to explain the importance of regular checkups not only for our own wellness but also for the wellness of those close to us.
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You need to learn to self-edit by deleting unnecessary verbiage:
The health centre is launching an unusual information campaign to remind the public, through a healthy touch of humor, of the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining quality of life, to present information about the latest technologies and methods in the modern medicine and beauty industry, and to explain
The health centre is launching an unusual information campaign to remind the public, through a healthy touch of humor, of the importance of prophylactic health checks in maintaining quality of life, to present information about the latest technologies and methods in the modern medicine and beauty industry, and to explain
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thank you! That was truly helpful! May I bother you with another sentence (I promise, the last one)!
I do not like the underlined part but I have no idea how to rephrase it!
We have chosen easily understandable way of expression for addressing the part of society which pays too little attention to the prophylaxis of health.
Thank you!
I do not like the underlined part but I have no idea how to rephrase it!
We have chosen easily understandable way of expression for addressing the part of society which pays too little attention to the prophylaxis of health.
Thank you!
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We have chosen easily understandable terms for the benefit of the segment of society which pays too little attention to prophylaxis/health.
Choose 'prophylaxis' or 'health', not both; their meanings heavily overlap.
Choose 'prophylaxis' or 'health', not both; their meanings heavily overlap.
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