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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.

Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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It is thought by some people that famous person or artists are receiving an excessive amount of cash. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this point of view and I believe that what they obtain is worthy. Besides, some occupation should get higher salary such as teacher or police.

On the one hand, the quantity of money that celebrities are gained depends on the economic market scale where they are working. For example, in the US or most developed countries, influencers are paid more money than those who ply in developing nations such as Vietnam or Korean. Part of the reason for this comes from citizen’s affordability. In wealthy countries, residents can make a great deal of income, so they can highly pay for their entertainment activities. That why the price of tickets or services in those countries is very high, which lead to entertainers’ opulence. Moreover, developing countries where GDP is still small, standard living of audience reduces, make it harder for stars can achieve the same amount of salary as those stars in developed countries.

On the other hand, I also believe that well-known people receive what they deserved. First is if someone wants to pursue a singer or artist career, they need to own the gifts which only some individuals in this world have, and then they need to undergo a hard training experience, lots of difficult challenges before they can gain a reputation for themselves and be able to make a living from the entertainment industry. Take G-Dragon as an instance, he had to train 11 years before his company allows him to make a debut, or Christian Bale, an excellent actor, had to go through plenty of harsh diets which is harmful to his health so that he could have a perfect body fits with his roles. People with patience, effort and talent are all worthy with their achievements.

In conclusion, although it is argued by some that stars an exaggerated cash is given to the artists, I personally believe that they are completely on merit with what they did