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The bar charts show the number of honey-bee colonies and the amount of honey produced in the US between 1970 and 2010.

Overall, the number of honey-bee and the amount of their production decreased in the 40-year period. Although, there were not exact relations during this period, From 1990 to 2010 honey-bee population and honey production dropped.

In 1970, there were 4 million honey-bee and this increased and reached the highest number at 4.2 million in 1980. During 30 years the honey-bee population went down and reached the lowest number at approximately 1.8 millions in 2010.

They had the highest amount of production, almost 130,000 tonnes, in 1970. It fell by about 20,000 after 10 years to 110,000 in 1980. However, in the next ten years, honey production jumped to 120,000 tonnes in 1990, this dropped by 50 tonnes for two decades and reached 70,000 in 2010. It is the amount of honey production for 40 years.

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The bar charts show the number of honey-bee colonies and the amount of honey produced in the US every decade / ten years between 1970 and 2010.

Overall, the number of honey-bee (incorrect. It is not counting insects.) and the amount of their production decreased over in the 40-year period. Although, there was no consistent trend ~~were not exact relations~~ during this period, From (incorrect capitalization) 1990 to 2010 both the honey-bee population and honey production dropped.

In 1970, there were 4 million honey-bee and this increased and reached ~~the highest number at~~ 4.2 million in 1980. During the following / next 30 years the honey-bee population went down and reached the lowest number at approximately 1.8 millions (wrong form) in 2010.

They had the highest amount of production, almost 130,000 tonnes, in 1970. It fell by about 20,000 after 10 years to 110,000 in 1980. However, in over the next ten years, honey production jumped to 120,000 tonnes in 1990, but this dropped by 50 tonnes for two decades and reached 70,000 in 2010. It is the amount of honey production for 40 years. (??)

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You will get a higher score if you do more than just copy the numbers that you see.

For example, in these charts, you can compute an interesting metric, the variation in hive productivity over the period.

Although the number of honey-bee colonies decreased by 56% (from 4 million to 1.75 million), honey production decreased only 46% (130 thousand to 70 thousand tonnes). In 1970, it required 31 honey-bee colonies to make one ton of honey, but this dropped to 25 in 2010. Thus, the average honey-bee colony in 2010 was much more productive than one in 1970. The lowest productivity was in 1980, where 39 colonies were needed to harvest each ton of honey.

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