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The line graph gives information about the percentage of ageing population in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.

Overall, the percentage of elderly people in all three countries is expected to increase by almost 20% in 2040.

In 1940, the proportion of the population aged 65 and over started at 5% in Japan, approximately 7% in Sweden and 9% in the USA. Although the percentage of ageing population in the USA and Sweden increased by about 6% in 1980, the percentage of elderly people in Japan decreased and reached the lowest amount at almost 3% in this year.

In spite of some fluctuation in percentage of ageing population in the USA and Sweden, probably their percentage will continue to rise next decades. After 1980, the proportion of the population aged 65 and over in Japan increased and significantly grow is expected between 2030 and 2040 and reach about 27%.

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The line graph gives information about (That is very vague. What data is plotted?) the percentage of ageing population in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.

(You need to be more precise and exact when you describe a mathematical diagram. e.g.

The line graph plots the percentage of a country's population who were over age 65. The three countries represented are Japan, Sweden and the USA. Historical data is given from 1940 to the present day, and there are projections into the future, ending at 2040. )

Overall, the percentage of elderly people (You do not need to repeat this. Besides, 65 is not elderly. You have told the reader that these people are over-65.) in all three countries is expected to increase by almost 20% (From what basis? Increase by 20% means that the percentage went from 30% to 50%, from 2% to 22% or from 62% to 82%) ~~in 2040~~. over the 100-year period.

Model paragraph.

Overall, the populations of these countries will age, with the over-65 age group forecast to account for between 23 and 27% of the population in 2040. This compares with values of 5-9% in 1940. The growth in the USA and Sweden is relatively continuous, but in Japan most of the increase will occur in the final decade.

In 1940, the proportions ~~of the population aged 65~~ ~~and over~~ started at 5% in Japan, approximately 7% in Sweden and 9% in the USA. Although in the USA and Sweden they ~~the~~ ~~percentage of ageing population in the USA and Sweden~~ had increased by about 6% in by 1980, ~~the percentage of elderly people~~ it had ~~in Japan~~ decreased in Japan and reached the lowest point ~~amount~~ at almost 3% in this year. (Learn to use pronouns and avoid repeating the phrase.)

In spite of some fluctuation (wrong word) in percentage of ageing population (wrong expression) in the USA and Sweden, probably their percentage will continue to rise over the next decades. After 1980, it ~~the proportion of the population aged 65 and over in Japan~~ increased in Japan and ~~significantly~~ significant growth ~~grow~~ is expected between 2030 and 2040 and reach about 27%.

Example: After the "overall" paragraph, you can write about each country separately.

In the USA, the growth pattern can be divided into three time intervals. Between 1940 and 1980, there was a steady increase from 9% to 15%. Next, there was a plateau where the percentages remained at a nearly constant value between 14 and 15%. After 2020, a linear growth from 15 to 24% is projected.

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