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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done?

Pupils are paying less attention and not concentrating properly on their class lessons at school. There are several reason behind this and it is pivotal for teachers and parents to implement appropriate steps to deal with this issue.

There are several triggers leading to lack of concentration. One of them is the diet of children, which is their high consumption in carbonated hydrate, resulting in behavioral changes such as hyperactive. For example, children nowadays are addicted to lots of snacks and carbonated beverages such as cokes and Pepsi, and the carbonation involved in these products cause a lack of ability to concentrate in class. To prevent this, these snack should be prohibited in school. Furthermore, parents have to play a part to as well, and they must keep an eye on their children’s consumptions of carbonation-related products.

Another factor would be the fact that in modern education system, teachers lack the freedom to discipline children. In the past, by taking drastic measures, they can force children pay full attention and put every effort to study in class, even if this meant physical punishment. However, these steps are no longer available or even banned at school nowadays, and in turn children are likely to get out of teacher’s control and even do not concentrate if they do not want to. In this way, children should of course not be abused, but teachers must be given more power to utilize the approach which they think appropriate to get the class under control without fear of recrimination.

In conclusion, there are several reasons why students are increasingly finding it difficult to pay attention and concentrate at school, and we need to adopt some measures to address this problem.

Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

People have their own different thoughts about how to succeed in life. While I recognize the benefits of wealth and appearance in help people achieve their goals easier with obstacles, I would argue that hard work and determination are the real keys to victory

On the one hand, wealth and good-looking can give people an edge over others in establishing and developing new relationships, and in turn thrive in not only personal life but also professional life. For example, money may not represent who you are; however, at least it gives you confidence to speak out your thoughts or choose your own career path such as starting a new business, and therefore step out of your comfort zone. Furthermore, an attractive appearance is able to easily give people a plus in communicating and interacting with society. In this way, individuals with pretty faces can potentially convince their thoughts and even sell their ideas to others in the most compassionate and compelling way.

On the other hand, I believe that people with diligence and determined attitude will always succeed in life no matter who they are. In fact, hardworking people means individuals putting every effort, their energy and time to obtain their own targets and therefore, their effort will pay off in the foreseeable future. In this way, victory will come to diligent and perseverant people by one way or another, even if they are not talented or disabled. Besides hard work, being able to stick with the target that has been set out, play an essential role in leading people to success, and with such a precious virtue, people decide to pay full attention and concentrate on accomplishing their work. For example, whether students are able to achieve excellent academic results in the final exams depends on his determination and strength to resist from distractions such as mobile phones and any kind of electrical devices, and in turn he could focus on studying and revision.

In conclusion, although affluence and good-looking can make people’ life smoother with less obstacles on the way to success, Hard work and determination are the keys to championship.