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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The three pie charts compare the yearly expenditure in five categories in 3 separate years, 1981, 1991, and 2001, respectively.Overall, teacher's salaries remained the largest cost while insurance contributed the least to total spending over the mentioned period. There were downward trends in spending on other workers' salaries and on resources while expenditure on insurance and furniture and equipment increase sharply.In detail, teachers' salaries initially accounted for 40% of expenditure, thence increased by 10% in 1991 before witnessing a light decrease to 45% at the end of the period, was the biggest segment. Meanwhile, insurance proportion in 2001 increased quadruple to 8% in comparison with the proportion in 1981, but it still was the smallest part of the chart. The percentage of money spent on furniture and equipment decreased by 10% between 1981 and 1991 but soared to 23% at the end of the period. In contrast, although spending on resources such as books had a slight growth of 5% from 1981 to 1991, it witnessed a dramatical drop in 2001, at 9%. Payment for other workers also decreased gradually by almost 7% every 10 years.

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The three pie charts compare the yearly expenditure of one school in the UK in five categories in 3 three separate years, 1981, 1991, and 2001~~, respectively~~. (incorrect usage. Also, when there are three separate years, it is not a "period" A period is a range of time on a line graph, or a time-series bar chart.)

Overall, teacher's salaries remained the largest cost while insurance contributed the least to total spending over the ~~mentioned~~ (Do not use the word "mentioned") period. There were downward trends in spending on other workers' salaries and on resources while expenditure on insurance and furniture and equipment increased ~~sharply~~.

In detail, teachers' salaries initially accounted for 40% of expenditure, ~~thence~~ increased by 10% in 1991 before witnessing (wrong word.) a light (wrong word) decrease to 45% in 2001. ~~at the end of the period,~~ was the biggest segment. (Ungrammatical. The verb "was" does not have any subject.) Meanwhile, insurance proportion (unnatural phrase) in 2001 increased quadruple (wrong usage) to 8% in comparison with the proportion in 1981, but it still was the smallest budget segment. ~~part of the chart~~. The percentage ~~of money~~ (wrong phrase) spent on furniture and equipment decreased by 10% between 1981 and 1991 but soared (Inappropriate word) to 23% in 2001. ~~at the end of the period.~~

In contrast, although spending on resources such as books had a slight growth of 5% from 1981 to 1991, it witnessed (Wrong word. Numbers, percentages and objects cannot witness things. Only people can do this.) a dramatical (wrong word) drop in 2001, at 9%. Payment (wrong word) for other workers also decreased gradually by almost 7% every 10 years.

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The three pie charts, dated 1981, 1991 and 2001, compare the percentage of yearly spending in one UK school on five budget categories. These are teacher’s salaries, other workers' salaries, furniture and equipment, resources (e.g. books), and insurance.

Overall, the greatest proportion of the school's budget went to paying employees. The two categories representing discretionary items, furniture and equipment and resources, together took the next largest proportion of the total expenditures. The last category, insurance, was the smallest, but it had the greatest relative increase.

In 1981, salaries made up just over two-thirds of the school's budget (68%), with teachers taking 40% and other staff 28%. This went up slightly to 72% by 1991, with the 10% rise in the teacher's salaries offset by a 6% decline in that of the other workers. In that year, teachers' salaries took up half of the budget, the largest proportion of all three years. In 2001, the total percentage devoted to salaries had dropped to 60%, 45% for teachers and 15% for non-teaching staff. The two discretionary items had a large variation individually, ranging between 5% to 23% for furniture and 9% to 20% for resources. The sum, however, was relatively consistent, 30% in 1981, 25% in 1991 and 32% in 2001. Finally, the cost of insurance took only 2% of spending in 1981, but it quadrupled to 8% in 2001.

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The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Overall, it is visible that spending on Insurance is highest increased and in contrast other workers salary. There were resources, furniture and equipment and teachers’ salaries fluctuated.

First of all, in 1981 total school’s highest spending on teachers’ salaries which was 40%. It jumped to 50% in 1991 but again fell by 5% in 2001. At the same time in 1981 total school lowest spending for insurance which was 2%. It has grown up to 3%, in 1991, and again raised up to 8% in 2001. Anyway, that was a minor percentage of the above chart. Furthermore, other workers’ salaries nearly decreased throughout the year. The spending on resources oscillated.

Therefore, total spending on teachers’ salaries and insurance were increased in 2001 than the year 1981. However other workers’ Salary was decreased.

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