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The first bar chart compares England with its capital in terms of average house prices in 1995 and 2013. The second graph shows the differences in house prices over six different areas of England in 2013.

Overall, people living in the capital of London had to pay a plethora of money for accommodation compared to the country's average house price. Another striking feature is that houses in London cost the most, whereas the least expensive ones are in the North East.

In detail, the average price of a house in London was 200,000 pounds, which was higher than that of London, at about 130,000 pounds. The difference in house value in London and England was even more significant in 2013, when the house price of London surged to 420,000 pounds, more than double the country’s average.

The expenditure of houses in London was recorded to be at the top of the list, a high of 400,000 pounds in 2013 compared to other areas. The money spent for houses in the South East and the South West ranked second and third places, at around 310,000 and 260,000 pounds respectively. In contrast, housing prices were more affordable for people living in the Midlands and North East, at only around a mere 100,000 pounds.

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The first bar chart compares England with its capital in terms of average house prices (unnatural) in 1995 and 2013. The second graph (What kind of graph?) shows the differences in house prices over six different areas of England in 2013. (What are these areas?)

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Overall, people living in the capital of London had to pay a plethora of (very bad - wrong words and they are very informal ) money for accommodation compared to the country's average house price. Another striking (Do not use dramatic words in science and math writing.) feature is that houses in London cost the most, whereas the least expensive ones are in the North East.

In detail, the average price of a house in London was 200,000 pounds, which was higher than that of London, (How can you say that London is higher than London - they are the same place.) at about 130,000 pounds. The difference in house value in London and England was even more significant in 2013, when the house price of London surged (Do not use dramatic words in science and math writing.) to 420,000 pounds, more than double the country’s average.

The expenditure of houses (wrong expression. Houses do not work and spend money.) in London was recorded to be at the top of the list, a high of 400,000 pounds in 2013 compared to other areas. The money spent for houses in the South East and the South West ranked second and third ~~places~~, at around 310,000 and 260,000 pounds respectively. In contrast, housing prices were more affordable for people living in the Midlands and North East, at only around ~~a mere~~ 100,000 pounds.

Note: This task is defective. The second chart has misspelt the name "London". There is no area in England named "Lodon".

The first bar chart compares the average home prices in London with those across the entire country in two years, 1995 and 2013. The second bar chart gives the 2013 house prices in six different areas of England: London, Midlands, Northeast, Southeast, Southwest and Northwest.

Overall, prices of homes went up from 1995, especially in London. In 2013, the average of prices in the London area are slightly less than those within the city limits; however it is the most expensive of all six regions in terms of housing.

In detail, house prices in London were about 50% higher than those in the country as a whole in 1995, 200 versus 130 thousand pounds. This difference was substantially more in 2013; not 50% higher but 210% higher. London real estate prices had more than doubled over that time span, rising from 200 to 420 thousand pounds whereas the national average went up by a lesser amount, from 130 to 200 thousand pounds. For other regions in 2013, in the Northwest, prices are the same as the national average, the least in the Northeast, at half the national average, and also relatively low in Midlands, 120 thousand pounds. The average for the London area is double the national average, but about 20,000 less than the city itself.

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