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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays in some nations around the world, the number of people who suffer from health issues because of eating an excessive amount of them are increasing. Therefore, it is believed that the government should increase the tax on this kind of food. I completely disagree with this point of view and the reasons will be covered in this essay.

First of all, I believe that fast food is not the only factor that leads to health problems. There are many other elements causing different diseases such as lack of sleep, smoking, drinking alcohol and along with other factors. For example, the cause of obesity is not only eating too much fast food but also lack of exercise and heredity factors. Thus, if the authorities impose a higher tax on fast food, it won’t reduce too much the number of sick people.

Additionally, fast food is very cheap, convenient and time-saving. To busy people, it is a good choice to help them have energy to continue their work in break time. There are also has a wide range of fast food for people to choose such as snack, hot dog, hamburger, popcorn and along with many other types of fast food. Moreover, if the tax on fast food is imposed higher, it will be unfair to people who has low income.

In conclusion, although fast food has some disadvantages such as having too much sugar and fat or waste of money, I believe that these advantages outweigh the drawbacks. I also strongly recommend that the government should raise the awareness of residents about health instead of imposing a higher tax on fast food.