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Essay & Composition Writing

Please check my writing for task 2.

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

The number of people argue that the significance of being rich stems from giving a chance people to assist others. I totally agree with this view that it is not money what people become happy, but it is feelings. Therefore, to help make people feel good and a sense of belonging.

To begin with, there is no meaning of wealth alone for the rich, while it can turn to a source of life for the poor.Indeed, wealthy people do not pay attention to money since they have everything, they want so that there is nothing for them to buy and then to be happy. At this point, the rich can be satisfied by meeting to other's needs since they can observe the amount of money that is insignificant for them could make another's life easier.

On the other hand, a sense of belonging to a society is one of the most fundamental needs for the wealthy individuals in psychology and the great way to create this sense is to be helpful. That is, many rich people isolate from their society due to having different lifestyle from public so they can feel loneliness. Therefore, to communicate with people and to feel a sense of unity is the best way to help people at the time needed. As a result of this, wealth people can feel own a part of society rather than isolation.

In conclusion, being rich is valuable as much as it is useful for people. The rich can feel own superb and a sense of unity by spending money to people.

  

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  • ) to assist others.
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