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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
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...Two months ago, when I first visited Sapa, I realized the weather was extremely different from that in my hometown, Hue. It was cold, and the air was very fresh. I enjoyed looking at the tall trees that were covered with fog. People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them. I stayed in a small but beautiful hotel where I had breakfast each morning. I bought many souvernirs for my family and friends, took lots of photos of the city and went to the local market as well. I just stayed there for 5 days, but Sapa gave me unforgetable memories. I will surely come there again...
...Two months ago, when I first visited Sapa, I realized the weather was extremely different from that in my hometown, Hue. It was cold, and the air was very fresh. I enjoyed looking at the tall trees that were covered with fog. People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them. I stayed in a small but beautiful hotel where I had breakfast each morning. I bought many souvernirs for my family and friends, took lots of photos of the city and went to the local market as well. I just stayed there for 5 days, but Sapa gave me unforgetable memories. I will surely come there again...
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Hello, It is a very nice writing. Everything is okay except some points: - People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them. Replace with with at (to smile at sb).
- Hello, It is a very nice writing.
- Everything is okay except some points: - People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them.
- Replace with with at (to smile at sb).
- We sometimes use to as well: If you smile to people, they will smile back to you.
- - I will surely come there again.
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Hello,
It is a very nice writing. Everything is okay except some points:
-People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them.
Replace with with at (to smile at sb).
We sometimes use to as well: If you smile to people, they will smile back to you.
-I will surely come there again.
Replace come with go
It is a very nice writing. Everything is okay except some points:
-People were friendly, they would always smile with me when I said hi to them.
Replace with with at (to smile at sb).
We sometimes use to as well: If you smile to people, they will smile back to you.
-I will surely come there again.
Replace come with go
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