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How to throw a surprised birthday party
Holding an impressive birthday party is not difficult. Some people care about birthday very much, and they think birthday must be celebrated. Be their friend, you should plan it for them. All you need is a computer, an audio-visual sound system and some steps. First, three weeks before birthday, start to gather some interesting or memorable pictures, video and music about birthday recipient to make a precious movie, and you can use built-in Windows Movie Maker that is easy to use. If you don’t know how to use, you can surf www.microsoft.com/windowsxp/using/moviemaker/default.mspx. Second, connect some people you want to invite and check the list. Next, ask everyone who attends the party to pretend forgetting birthday recipient’s birthday to make her disappointed. Then decorate someone’s home where there’s an audio-visual sound system and buy some drinks, snacks and a cake on that day. Later, call and tell birthday recipient at night that someone whose home is party location has a car accident and ask her to look in on him together. After that, when they get into his home, everyone sings birthday song and take the cake out. Finally, broadcast the touching movie and enjoy this happy and heart-stirring moment. And you should make sure the birthday recipient doesn’t have a date at night beforehand. If you follow these steps, the birthday recipient will be surprised and moved.
This is my writing, and it's a process paragraph.
Please help me correct it and give me some suggestions.
I'm not sure whether it is coherent or not...
How to throw a surprised birthday party
Holding an impressive birthday party is not difficult. Some people care about birthday very much, and they think birthday must be celebrated. Be their friend, you should plan it for them. All you need is a computer, an audio-visual sound system and some steps. First, three weeks before birthday, start to gather some interesting or memorable pictures, video and music about birthday recipient to make a precious movie, and you can use built-in Windows Movie Maker that is easy to use. If you don’t know how to use, you can surf www.microsoft.com/windowsxp/using/moviemaker/default.mspx. Second, connect some people you want to invite and check the list. Next, ask everyone who attends the party to pretend forgetting birthday recipient’s birthday to make her disappointed. Then decorate someone’s home where there’s an audio-visual sound system and buy some drinks, snacks and a cake on that day. Later, call and tell birthday recipient at night that someone whose home is party location has a car accident and ask her to look in on him together. After that, when they get into his home, everyone sings birthday song and take the cake out. Finally, broadcast the touching movie and enjoy this happy and heart-stirring moment. And you should make sure the birthday recipient doesn’t have a date at night beforehand. If you follow these steps, the birthday recipient will be surprised and moved.
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Anon: It would be better if you name the people. " Then you can use "Mary" instead of "guest of honor" or "birthday recipient", etc. How to throw a surprise d birthday party Holding an impressive birthday party is not difficult.
- Anon: It would be better if you name the people.
- " Then you can use "Mary" instead of "guest of honor" or "birthday recipient", etc.
- How to throw a surprise d birthday party Holding an impressive birthday party is not difficult.
- Some people care about birthday s very much, and they think birthday s must be celebrated.
- Be their friend, you should plan it for them.
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Anon: It would be better if you name the people.
Say for example, "Suppose that your friend Mary is going to have a birthday and you want to surprise her."
Then you can use "Mary" instead of "guest of honor" or "birthday recipient", etc.
How to throw a surprised birthday party
Holding an impressiv
Say for example, "Suppose that your friend Mary is going to have a birthday and you want to surprise her."
Then you can use "Mary" instead of "guest of honor" or "birthday recipient", etc.
How to throw a surprise
Holding an impressiv
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