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MIG Posted 13 years ago
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Please check my wording

Hi. Please check my wordings below.

1 ) He was desperately trying to save his company but he didn't know how to do that and, as always, his so-called Step-mother were scorning and rebuking him for loosing family's health and compromising the heritage that had been given to him after his father's death. His diverging life were started right after his father's death, while he wasn't ready for that, because he was so engaged in partying that he could even see his ill father.

2 ) Pondering about life gave me this idea (Any word to replace this bold phrase?) that I wouldn't be able to cope my challenges without my family. They were and are whose(or those who) that have paved the way for me to reach here and stopped (is it also possible to write prevent instead of stop) me from toppling over.

Thank you very much in advance.
  

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I have underlined some problem areas. If you post your revised text, we will check it. 1 ) He was desperately trying to save his compa ny b ut he didn't know how to do that an d, a s always, his so-called Step- mother were scorning and rebuking him for loosing family's health and compromising the his heritage that had been given to him after his father's death .

— Mister Micawber

  • I have underlined some problem areas.
  • If you post your revised text, we will check it.
  • 1 ) He was desperately trying to save his compa ny b ut he didn't know how to do that an d, a s always, his so-called Step- mother were scorning and rebuking him for loosing family's health and compromising the his heritage that had been given to him after his father's death .
  • His diverging life were started right after his father's death, while he wasn't ready for that, because he was so engaged in partying that he could even see his ill father.
  • ) that I wouldn't be able to cope my challenges without my family.
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I have underlined some problem areas. If you post your revised text, we will check it.

1 ) He was desperately trying to save his company but he didn't know how to do that and, as always, his so-called Step-mother were scorning and rebuking him for loosing family's health and compromising the his heritage that
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Thank you Mister Micawber.
I failed to understand several underlined errors ( <-----is it correct?), I hope they will be correct in this edited version.
Would you please check it again?

1 ) He was desperately trying to save his company, but he didn't know how to do that and as always, his so-called step-mother was scorning and r
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1) He was desperately trying to save his company, but he didn't know how to do that and as always, his so-called step-mother was scornful, rebuking him for wasting his family's wealth and compromising his heritage. His dissipated life started right after his father's death, when (neither conjunction works because the relationship between the underli
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Thank you very much Mister Micawber.
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