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SUBJECT: You are interested in applying for the job advertised below, but you require more information. Write a letter to SUMMER CAMP USA, covering the notes you have made

SUMMER WORK USA

Are you 18-30, enthusiastic& friendly? Do you enjoy working with children(age?)? Are you available this summer(when/how long?) to work on American (where?) summer camps& able to fly before 30th June? Do you have skills to offer in land & water-based sports (Yes-tennis& water skiing), or have maintenance or office skills? (Yes-Good at D.I.Y, Yes-some typing)

-salary?

-accommodation?

-responsibilities?

My Letter:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I saw your advertisment for summer work USA and would like to be considered.There are a few questions I should like to ask you.

Firstly,could you possibly inform me how old are the children I will be working with? Also,could you please explain in what state of the USA, when and for how long the work is available? You mention of some skills that are needed. I am good at sports like tennis and water skiing. I am keen on D.I.Y and I can do some typing.

In addiction,would it be possible for you to tell me my monthly salary and if there will be any accommodation for me. Lastly,I would like to know what are the responsibilities I will have to take.

I would be grateful if you contact me as soon as you find it convenient.

Yours faithfully,

(signature)

TATIANA X******I

MountainHiker · Accepted Answer

Dear Sir orMadam:

I would like to be considered for summer work in the United States as described in your advertisement (state where).

I have the following strong skills and attributes:
- Enjoy working with people, especially children;
- Enjoy outdoor sports, including tennis and water skiing
- blah blah blah

(Tatiana, rather than point form as shown above, you might wish to put this information in paragraph form....

Because I enjoy working with children, I know I would the perfect candidate. I also enjoy sports, especially outdoor sport such as tennis and water skiing. Moreover, blah blah blah)

Before I can accept a position with your company, I need to know more about the position. Can you please answer the following questions:

Age range of the children? Do they have any special needs?
Job responsibilities?
Appproximate location?
Will transportation be provided?
Duration of the work?
Will accomodation be provided?
Approximate salary or hourly wage? What is my expected cost of living while in the United States? (Note to Tatiana, this question is meant to answer, how much money will you save by the end of your work?)

I am anxious to learn more and begin working with you in the United States.

Thank you for your kind consideration, and I look forward to receiving your reply soon.

Yours faithfully,

(signature)

Tatiana, please proceed cautiously. I dislike vague job descriptions. The United States already has a high unemployment rate with many people looking for work. So, if they are wanting to hire foreigners, I suspect the pay will be very low. If I were you, I would try to speak with someone who has worked with them before. Did they enjoy the work? What was their experience?

Sometimes people from foreign countries are treated poorly. Don't let this happen to you.

MountainHiker · Answer

I googled Summer Camp USA

- http://www.iep.org.au/summercampusa/summercampusa.asp

from there, look toward the bottom of the page. They have FAQs, Facebook groups and other helpful resources. Learn as much as you can before sending your letter.

If you want to revise your letter and resubmit it, someone will look it over for you.

Anonymous · Answer

Oh, haha thanks for your time but, this is an essay for my cambrigde test. <img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/10.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/10.gif' alt='Emotion: embarrassed'/> I just want you to check my Grammar,spelling etc. I'm so sorry

Anonymous · Answer

I am so sorry for beeing misunderstood. This isn't real. It's a formal letter for Cambridge exams!

MountainHiker · Answer

Better safe than sorry.

Please see this thread:

Please look for Firefox add-on After the Deadline as well as MS Word spelling and grammar checker.

Dear Sir/Madam, (I would use a colon)

I saw your advertisment for summer work USA and would like to be considered.There are a few questions I shwould like to ask you.

Firstly (where's secondly, thirdly, fourthly?),could you possibly inform me how old are the children I will be working with? Also,could you please explain in what state of the USA (incomplete...in what state what?), when and for how long the work is available? You mention of some skills that are needed. I am good at sports like tennis and water skiing. I am keen on D.I.Y (what is D.I.Y??) and I can do some typing.

In addiction,would it be possible for you to tell me my monthly salary and if there will be any accommodation for me?. Lastly,I would like to know what ~~are the~~ my responsibilities. ~~I will have to take.~~

I would be grateful if you could please contact me as soon ~~as you find it convenient~~.

Yours faithfully,

(signature)

TATIANA X**I

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