Please check my task 1 essay. Thank you!

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The table compares the relative distribution of money (in percentages) on three different categories of product and service (food/drink/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in five European nations. The data was from 2002.

Overall, the greatest amount of money went to food/drinks/tobacco, which was more than that of clothing/footwear and leisure/education combined. Italian consumed the most clothing whereas the highest expenditure for the other two categories went to Turkey.

Food/drinks/tobacco comprised 32.14% in Turkey, followed by Ireland and Spain with 28.91% and 18.80%, respectively. The numbers for Italy and Sweden were about the same. However, in terms of fashion items, Italian people's consumption was much higher than other countries (9.00%), while the remaining three countries had similar values, ranging from nearly 5.50% to just over 6.50%.

Turkey's fund for entertainment and education was nearly equal to that of Sweden and Spain combined (at 4.35%). The total spending of Ireland and Italy was 5.41%, of which 2.21% was the former and 3.20% was the latter.

- Is there any tips for writing task 1 under 20 minutes time pressure? I exceed the time limit every time Thank you for your help!!

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Hannah Anh- Is there any tips for writing task 1 under 20 minutes time pressure?

Yes.

You need to write 50 essays for Task 1. It is amazing how your time will get shorter and shorter because your brain will be full of appropriate phrases, vocabulary, and analysis techniques. Not only will your time improve, your essay will also be more sophisticated because you will have learned how to combine categories and do some basic arithmetic such as sums, averages and ratios.

You will have the essay outline in your head, too. It will get easier and easier as you practice. So do not get discouraged. You can write 3 different essays for the same task. Practice different opening paragraphs. Practice different "overall" paragraphs. Do not worry about timing at the beginning.
Also, you can study lots of sample essays to learn vocabulary and phrases. I have posted many of these on the forum in answer to other students.

You have 60 minutes for both Task 1 and Task 2 together. Task 2 counts twice as much as task 1 in the overall scoring. That is why they suggest 40 minutes and 20 minutes.

To get the best score, you have to have a strategy planned in advance. You need to know your timing for both tasks, and perhaps allocate it differently than the recommendation.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The table compares the relative distribution of money (in percentages) on three different categories of product and service (food/drink/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in five European nations, Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. The data was from 2002.

Overall, the greatest amount of money went to food/drinks/tobacco, w

Overall, the greatest amount of money went to food/drinks/tobacco, which was more than that of clothing/footwear and leisure/education combined. Italians ~~consumed~~ (they didn't eat their shirts!) spent the most on clothing whereas the highest expenditures for the other two categories went to Turkey.

The allocations for Food/drinks/tobacco were ~~comprised~~ 32.14% in Turkey, followed by Ireland and Spain with 28.91% and 18.80%, respectively. ~~The numbers for~~ And in Italy and Sweden they were about the same. However, in terms of fashion items, Italians' ~~people's consumption~~ budget was much higher than other countries (9.00%), while the remaining three countries had similar values, ranging from nearly 5.50% to just over 6.50%. (You do not need a new paragraph - the topic of detailed comparisons continues.)

Turkey's ~~fund~~ spending for entertainment and education was nearly equal to that of Sweden and Spain combined (at 4.35%), whereas in ~~The total spending of~~ Ireland and Italy it was 5.41%, of which 2.21% was the former and 3.20% was the latter.

Please check my task 1 essay. Thank you!

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