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Nhật Bình Posted 6 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please check my summary

Read the passage below and summarize it using 1-3 sentences. Your answer will be judged on the quality of your writing and on how well your answer presents the key points in the passage.

Despite having started life as a broadsheet in 1964, The Sun has become not only the premier tabloid in the United Kingdom, but also the biggest-selling paper of any kind, with a daily circulation of over three million. Owned by Rupert Murdoch, an Australian who now holds US citizenship, and who does not pay tax in the UK, the paper has traditionally been to the right of the political spectrum.

Much of its rise in popularity has been attributed to its introduction of topless models on page three in 1970 and of bingo in the 1980s. Loved and loathed in equal measure, the paper’s staple diet is celebrity gossip and exposés, and it is also renowned for its way with catchy, punning headlines.

Over the years, the paper has frequently been sued for libel and has had accusations of sexism, homophobia, jingoism and vicious personal attacks on public figures levelled against it, yet little seems to dent its popularity!


My summary:

The Sun, owned by Ruber Murdoch, has become the principal gutter press and the best-selling paper in the UK. Along with the introduction of topless models and of bingo at the end of the twentieth century which has catapulted the Sun to enormous fame were renowned figures gossip and jarring headlines. Though a multitude of scandals have put a stain on the paper, its prevalence appears not to dim.

  

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It is not the best summary. The verb tenses are unnatural, there is a major spelling error, and there are awkward phrases. You seem to believe that the extensive use of synonyms is necessary.

  • It is not the best summary.
  • The verb tenses are unnatural, there is a major spelling error, and there are awkward phrases.
  • You seem to believe that the extensive use of synonyms is necessary.
  • That is not the case when you are summarizing a passage.
  • It is far better to use its key words.
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It is not the best summary. The verb tenses are unnatural, there is a major spelling error, and there are awkward phrases. You seem to believe that the extensive use of synonyms is necessary. That is not the case when you are summarizing a passage. It is far better to use its key words.

By the way, the history of the game of bingo goes back many centuries. It was not invented by the Su

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The Sun, owned by Ruber Rupert Murdoch, has become the principal [ 1] gutter press and the best-selling paper daily tabloid in the UK. Along with the introduction of its topless models and of bing

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Here is my summary.

The underlined words are the key words in the passage. Note that I have not copied any sentences. The first sentence is an introduction, and the second sentence, a summary of the main content.


The Sun, a very popular tabloid in the UK, is owned by Rupert Murdoch, who founded it in 1964. Its titillating and controversial content

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