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Mickey Mouse 8241 Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please check my short essay

Indian families are nuts about kids. That is why a baby shower is considered (to be) a momentous ceremony among all the other ceremonies. Basically, before mothers give birth to children, they go on a shopping spree to buy baby wear, shoes, dolls and toys, not to mention cradles for their babies. Apart from that, the immediate family also give the
mother-to-be such stuff as a gift. Once a mother is delivered of her baby, everyone in close and distant family pay a visit to congratulate her. There is an enjoyable party (which is) held to celebrate the bith of the baby and everyone is kindly/warmly welcomed to the party. In the party, the couple announce their baby’s name to the family, and the interesting thing is that everyone whishes a happy and healthy life for the baby. This ceremony is never-to-be-forgotten by typical Indian families with Indian roots/that have an established cultural background.

Hello All,
Could anyone kindly check my essay for any errors?!
Thansk
  

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Indian families are nuts about kids. That is why a baby shower is considered a momentous ceremony among (maybe ‘above’) all the other ceremonies. Basically, before mothers give birth to children, they go on a shopping spree to buy baby wear, shoes, dolls and toys, not to mention cradles for their babies.

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  • Indian families are nuts about kids.
  • That is why a baby shower is considered a momentous ceremony among (maybe ‘above’) all the other ceremonies.
  • Basically, before mothers give birth to children, they go on a shopping spree to buy baby wear, shoes, dolls and toys, not to mention cradles for their babies.
  • Apart from (As well as) that, the immediate family (also) give the mother-to-be such stuff (items) as (a gift = gifts).
  • Once a mother is delivered of her baby, everyone in (both the) close and distant family pay(s) a visit to congratulate her.
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Indian families are nuts about kids. That is why a baby shower is considered a momentous ceremony among (maybe ‘above’) all the other ceremonies. Basically, before mothers give birth to children, they go on a shopping spree to buy baby wear, shoes, dolls and toys, not to mention cradles for their babies. Apart from (As well as) that, the immediate family (also) give the mother-to-be such stuff (it
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You are great. Thanks for your wonderful help.
*** bless you.
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Mickey Mouse 8241Once a mother is delivered of her baby
This is very odd and not in common, everyday, non-medical English. It would be better as Once a mother has delivered her baby, but, even that is very formal. It would be simpler and more natural to say Once a mother (or mum) has had her baby.
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First, I should remind the reader that this essay was written for and by someone from India, where the expressions and traditions have not changed as often as a newborn baby must be. While I agree that the expression ‘is delivered of’ is old, the word ‘deliver’ has changed in meaning also. Today we have ‘delivery rooms’ where obstetricians or doctors ‘deliver’ babies. The mother is also said to
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Anonymous Mickey Mouse 8241Once a mother is delivered of her babyThis is very odd and not in common, everyday, non-medical English. It would be better as Once a mother has delivered her baby, but, even that is very formal. It would be simpler and more natural to say Once a mother (or mum) has had her baby.
Yes. It's not in the everyday English of many English
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