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Creativeguru Posted 13 years ago
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Please check my paragraph

Your way of looking at life is about to change forever. Here is a township that has been built keeping in mind all lifestyle amenities you could wish for. We know wishes are never ending that’s why we have given you infinite choices to make your everyday a memorable day.
  

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On the whole, it's really great, I'd only suggest some minor changes: Your way of looking at life is about to change forever. Here is a township that has been built with all lifestyle amenities you could desire in mind. We know that the list of what one could wish for never ends, which is why we have given you an infinite range of choices, all designed to make every day of your life a memorable one.

— ShatteredEquilibrium

  • On the whole, it's really great, I'd only suggest some minor changes: Your way of looking at life is about to change forever.
  • Here is a township that has been built with all lifestyle amenities you could desire in mind.
  • We know that the list of what one could wish for never ends, which is why we have given you an infinite range of choices, all designed to make every day of your life a memorable one.
  • (I put "desire" in order to avoid the repetition of "wish")
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On the whole, it's really great, I'd only suggest some minor changes:

Your way of looking at life is about to change forever. Here is a township that has been built with all lifestyle amenities you could desire in mind. We know that the list of what one could wish for never ends, which is why we have given you an infinite range of choices, all designed to make every day of your life a mem
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Thanks for your help. You have added the missing charm by rephrasing the last line

Thanks again
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