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Creativeguru Posted 14 years ago
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Please check my paragraph

Mane Developers presents Lotus park, a truly exceptional second home, which you have always dreamt of. No one can understand your needs like us. The time has come to fulfil all your desires. It’s the new window to your aspirations where you can choose your OWN LUXURY. Now you don’t have to search far and wide for your dream home. All is here at Lotus Park.
  

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I helped correct some small mistakes in your paragraph, as seen below, otherwise it is written well: Mane Developers presents Lotus park, the truly exceptional second home which you have always dreamt of. No one understands your needs like us. The time has come to fulfill all your desires.

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  • I helped correct some small mistakes in your paragraph, as seen below, otherwise it is written well: Mane Developers presents Lotus park, the truly exceptional second home which you have always dreamt of.
  • No one understands your needs like us.
  • The time has come to fulfill all your desires.
  • It’s the new window to your aspirations where you can choose your own luxury.
  • Now you don’t have to search far and wide for your dream home; all is here at Lotus Park.
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I helped correct some small mistakes in your paragraph, as seen below, otherwise it is written well:

Mane Developers presents Lotus park, the truly exceptional second home which you have always dreamt of. No one understands your needs like us. The time has come to fulfill all your desires. It’s the new window to your aspirations where you can choose your own luxury. Now you don’t have to
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Mane Developers present Lotus Park, a truly exceptional second home community, which you have always dreamed of. No one understands your needs like we do. The time has come to
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Hey, you did a great job! I'm not so experienced at this, so I'm glad you could help him.
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Thanks! I'm new here. I don't want to discourage you. It's great that you helped too! Emotion: smile
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Mane Developers is a company developing Lotus Park, hence it is singular. So to best of my knowledge it should be Mane Developers presents rather the present

Kindly advise
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I apologize, yes, "presents" seems correct under the circumstances. Like "DreamWorks presents..." Emotion: smile
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I'm sorry to be the wet blanket, but the part about knowing all my needs and fulfilling all my desires make you sound more like a *** service than a home developer.
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Thank you sir for your honest feedback.
Indeed whatever you said it is true
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CreativeguruThank you sir for your honest feedback.
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