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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing
please check my Motivation Letter
This is my Mo Letter, please correct mistakes, I m sure there are many but My Eng is too bad...thanks in advanced
Dear Sir/Madam,
It was unimaginable when I received the first foreign scholarship for my Bachelor of Science in Computer (B.Sc). The thing that I has really dignified and kept in mind is studying abroad always brings students much value.
I got familiar to the computers quite early during my Secondary School in even though IT was not an official subject. I loved and was fascinated with this small machine which exercises both my creative and our logical side. My dream was to become a famous IT researcher in the future. I entered Hanoi University of Technology, one of the best Universities in Vietnam with IT major, and as my dream, I got chance to start my B.Sc in September 2002 and earned Degree in September 2006 at in . Living and studying in an industrial environment during my undergraduate had helped me develop my personal ability, my skill and my knowledge of Computer Technology. Equipped fundamental theory in the class and through some part time projects, It empowered my capacity, classes that I engaged in include Internet Programming, Desktop Application Programming and Network Security, I like to work with Linux environment, especially for firewall protection system. I was a fan of C++ programming language; it was the reason for me to do successfully my thesis “P2P Video Conferencing in the context of Video over IP” using C++.
My professor Prof. Dr. Muliawati and my dean Ir. Rila Mandala, Ph.D always encourage me for my further study, and to my mind, I always pursue the dream, I wish to earn a Master Degree in Computer Science, even, I intend to follow this up with a Ph.D, therefore I know I must return to the academic world for my family, my research, my dedication to education and my further growth.
I know my second opportunity came since I heard about from my classmate who is studying there. I spoke to my professors, my lecturers and my colleges about this opportunity of your University. is reputable for its research facilities and computing resources. In addition, the information from website also gave me much interest in there. I have applied for scholarship and I believe Leeds University is my right choice for my Master of Computer Science.
Finally, I kindly want to indicate my request in order to be considered for one of the scholarships that is provided by . I am very ambitious to pursue a career of academic research I sincerely hope that my personal qualities and educational experience will be sufficient for you to consider me an appropriate match. If there is any possibility of arranging an interview, I would appreciate hearing from you.
Dear Sir/Madam,
It was unimaginable when I received the first foreign scholarship for my Bachelor of Science in Computer (B.Sc). The thing that I has really dignified and kept in mind is studying abroad always brings students much value.
I got familiar to the computers quite early during my Secondary School in even though IT was not an official subject. I loved and was fascinated with this small machine which exercises both my creative and our logical side. My dream was to become a famous IT researcher in the future. I entered Hanoi University of Technology, one of the best Universities in Vietnam with IT major, and as my dream, I got chance to start my B.Sc in September 2002 and earned Degree in September 2006 at in . Living and studying in an industrial environment during my undergraduate had helped me develop my personal ability, my skill and my knowledge of Computer Technology. Equipped fundamental theory in the class and through some part time projects, It empowered my capacity, classes that I engaged in include Internet Programming, Desktop Application Programming and Network Security, I like to work with Linux environment, especially for firewall protection system. I was a fan of C++ programming language; it was the reason for me to do successfully my thesis “P2P Video Conferencing in the context of Video over IP” using C++.
My professor Prof. Dr. Muliawati and my dean Ir. Rila Mandala, Ph.D always encourage me for my further study, and to my mind, I always pursue the dream, I wish to earn a Master Degree in Computer Science, even, I intend to follow this up with a Ph.D, therefore I know I must return to the academic world for my family, my research, my dedication to education and my further growth.
I know my second opportunity came since I heard about from my classmate who is studying there. I spoke to my professors, my lecturers and my colleges about this opportunity of your University. is reputable for its research facilities and computing resources. In addition, the information from website also gave me much interest in there. I have applied for scholarship and I believe Leeds University is my right choice for my Master of Computer Science.
Finally, I kindly want to indicate my request in order to be considered for one of the scholarships that is provided by . I am very ambitious to pursue a career of academic research I sincerely hope that my personal qualities and educational experience will be sufficient for you to consider me an appropriate match. If there is any possibility of arranging an interview, I would appreciate hearing from you.
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Dear Sir/Madam, It was unimaginable [wrong word] when I received the first [the first in your country, university or course? The thing that I has really dignified [wrong word] and kept in mind is studying abroad always brings students much value [benefit]. I got first became familiar with [or interested in] the computers quite early during my Secondary School in Vietnam , even though IT was not an official subject.
- Dear Sir/Madam, It was unimaginable [wrong word] when I received the first [the first in your country, university or course?
- The thing that I has really dignified [wrong word] and kept in mind is studying abroad always brings students much value [benefit].
- I got first became familiar with [or interested in] the computers quite early during my Secondary School in Vietnam , even though IT was not an official subject.
- I loved and was fascinated by this small machine which exercises both my creative and our [you need to be consistent in pronoun choice] logical side.
- My dream was to become a famous IT researcher in the future.
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Dear Sir/Madam,
It was unimaginable [wrong word] when I received the first [the first in your country, university or course? Or your first?] foreign scholarship for my Bachelor of Science in Computing [or Computer Science] (B.Sc).The thing that I has really dignified [wrong
It was unimaginable [wrong word] when I received the first [the first in your country, university or course? Or your first?] foreign scholarship for my Bachelor of Science in Computing [or Computer Science] (B.Sc).The thing that I has really dignified [wrong
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